The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 96 "Warped motivation"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from angelface2
Well, Carolyn, you are right about that, we sometimes choose the wrong path. In the case of your poem, the innocent suffer. We must pray for the terrorists. It is the only thing that will help! :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
Well, Carolyn, you are right about that, we sometimes choose the wrong path. In the case of your poem, the innocent suffer. We must pray for the terrorists. It is the only thing that will help! :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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It is so sad, when one of them is killed a mothers heart breaks just the same..
Comment from The Death
Hi, Carolyn.
You have made strong social commentary here. Excellent word economy in this well-penned write.
I loved the first line. It's creative and impacting. Strong word choices make it more appealing, aided by striking presentation with red background(denoting blood and evil) and white font(the innocent lives).
Warped motivation
terror-driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
Superb use of R consonance in all the three lines. It's sad and horrifying to see how those people are causing so much harm to everyone.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
Hi, Carolyn.
You have made strong social commentary here. Excellent word economy in this well-penned write.
I loved the first line. It's creative and impacting. Strong word choices make it more appealing, aided by striking presentation with red background(denoting blood and evil) and white font(the innocent lives).
Warped motivation
terror-driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
Superb use of R consonance in all the three lines. It's sad and horrifying to see how those people are causing so much harm to everyone.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Hi there Anupam,
It is sad, for both sides, some mother somewhere must grieve so for the loss of their terrorist sons. The innocent suffer in many ways.
I appreciate your fine comments.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Samuel Dickens
Brain-washed and terror driven, that's for sure. It's beyond me how those people could think God would condone them murdering unarmed people like that. Martyr, my foot--I think it may be hot where they're going.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
Brain-washed and terror driven, that's for sure. It's beyond me how those people could think God would condone them murdering unarmed people like that. Martyr, my foot--I think it may be hot where they're going.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
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thank you Sam for your insightful comments. The martyrs are more than likely the hostages they killed. Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
terror-driven cowards - add the hyphen
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
you capture so well how such people make a tragic, misguided, warped choice to murder others as some sort of revenge for the wrongs they believe they as a people have experienced
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
terror-driven cowards - add the hyphen
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
you capture so well how such people make a tragic, misguided, warped choice to murder others as some sort of revenge for the wrongs they believe they as a people have experienced
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
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Thanks Brooke, such a tragedy for all. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Smoothiecool
your 5-7-5 few words allow the reader to see the warped mind of terrorists
good visual
good use "R" consonance
flows
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
your 5-7-5 few words allow the reader to see the warped mind of terrorists
good visual
good use "R" consonance
flows
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
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Thanks SC, for your fine words. :-) Carolyn
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most welcome
have a blessed day ....SC <> Faye (*:*)
Comment from Neonewman
Well stated my friend, this world seems to be in such unrest and we need to relish life as we live it. Well crafted 5-7-5 with a statement well received.
God bless !
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
Well stated my friend, this world seems to be in such unrest and we need to relish life as we live it. Well crafted 5-7-5 with a statement well received.
God bless !
Steve
Comment Written 09-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Thank you Steve for your fine comments. I am glad you approved.
Carolyn
Comment from skye
Warped motivation
terror driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
It takes a long time for the teachings of generations to change. Terrorists learn from many places, many ideas. I hope we have enough time to teach the new generations that peace is better.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
Warped motivation
terror driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
It takes a long time for the teachings of generations to change. Terrorists learn from many places, many ideas. I hope we have enough time to teach the new generations that peace is better.
Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Thanks skye,
I agree, it will take education and a willingness to change before that occurs.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from kiwijenny
Warped motivation
terror driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
Yep this says it all ...brainwashed murderers....do they feel remorse...when they flip through cartoon pages ...we killed but they reprinted!
God bless
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
Warped motivation
terror driven cowards thrive
Brain-washed murderers
Yep this says it all ...brainwashed murderers....do they feel remorse...when they flip through cartoon pages ...we killed but they reprinted!
God bless
Comment Written 09-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for this review. And the horror of it all, most murderers kill in secret.. terrorist want to be seen committing the act..
Carolyn
Comment from misscookie
I is written suffer little children that come unto me... Did he mean that for adults too?
I pray If I don't live long enough to see the change my children and so on will.
Have a blessed week en.,
Cookie
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
I is written suffer little children that come unto me... Did he mean that for adults too?
I pray If I don't live long enough to see the change my children and so on will.
Have a blessed week en.,
Cookie
Comment Written 09-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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I think Jesus was saying 'I will always have time for little kids, and if you don't become like one of them (innocent, loving,trusting, obeying, wanting to please) you won't inherit the kingdom of God. A great example to us adults.... I pray also for change in our world. Thank you misscookie. Love, Carolyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent! The more people write and stand up to these cowards, the more we take away their power to terrorise us. Well done, I have written one, so have a few of my other friends on here, we really must unite. A pleasure to read!!! xsx sandra
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
Excellent! The more people write and stand up to these cowards, the more we take away their power to terrorise us. Well done, I have written one, so have a few of my other friends on here, we really must unite. A pleasure to read!!! xsx sandra
Comment Written 09-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Thanks Sandra, I will go right now and read yours as well.
:-) Carolyn