Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Hi, Bev

I'm glad to have found this today. I find these short poetic forms interesting and this one is very haiku. In fact, I was thinking with two nature related lines to start it, it would also make a terrific tanka. But as a haiku, it is still wonderful. I admire your use of 'discourse' in line two. With that word you've created a most pondering poem.

Well done,
Ray

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2015

Hi, Ray

Thanks for taking time to seek out and review this poem. I am flattered by your insights, as I consider your mastery of this form quite remarkable.

:) Bev

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Holy check-those-booths: I darn near missed this one too, and it is stunning! So clever, and so true, too - those dreams often direct our course in life far more than we realize, I bet. LOVELY!

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Dawn, thanks so much for this gracious review. I find my dreams to be more powerful when I keep a diary. They seem to move even deeper into channeling. Anyway, thanks so much.

Hugs, Bev

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

What an intriguing picture! I don't think I've ever tried a 1-9-1--it appears to be quite a challenge, but you handled it well and created a thoughtful message. Best wishes in the contest. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Joan. I like doing the short syllable challenges once in a while. Someone better won, but thanks for the wishes! :) Bev

Comment from Curly Girly

Exceptional

I love horses - even though this one might be a nightmare! I think your stanza is simply perfect for this contest. To me, it appears to meet all the criteria spot-on. Good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014

Hi, CG. Thank you so much for your wonderful review! Another entry won, which is okay with me as it was a great entry. I really appreciate your generosity and encouragement.

Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

You've got the required syllabic count, my dear Bev.

How does one comment on such a tiny poem? :) Still, one must write lengthy nothings, or the site will protest and kick one out, right??

Good work. Popping in to say hello. I have to get caught up on the chapters I missed. Missed FS SO much.

xxx

Sonali

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014

Thanks for 'popping' in, Sonali. I would tend to agree that it's hard to do the required reviews on small poems. Thanks for your insights and generosity. :) Bev

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Yes, everything starts out as a dream (or a thought). Once we get the concept, we can work steadily toward our goal to achieve it.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014

I couldn't agree more, B. :)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Fascinating pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 1/9/1 syllable count for the contest
good alliteration in dreams discourse
an interesting observation about the nature of dreams
Brooke

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so very much for gracious review. :)

Comment from rjpurdy

Excellent

What a provocative poem you have written. Nice flow, with a good start and ending. A strong contender for sure. Best wishes in the voting. rj

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so very much, RJ. :)