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She took his newspaper

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Comment from Muffins
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This is extreme. These two don't waste anytime do they? An amazing effort in displaying love or is it lust at first sight? This hot scene will make many readers smile, a few blush and few quiver and say "how did LoannaLois knew this was me?"

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from Nosha17
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Well written piece of flash fiction. Nice use of language, flowed along well, good characterisations, most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from Domino 2
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This is very romantic. I just wish I could afford a flight to Brazil to maybe meet this 'easy-going' lady. I wonder if they joined the 'mile high club'. :-)

Fun and entertaining read.

Best wishes, Ray.


 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from victor 66
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I always appreciate a good love story. A 'romantic', I believe, loves life. We don't need to envy but just to imagine. I thought the imagery of your story was quite good. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from mfowler
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This casual encounter soon becomes far more through the action of taking the man's paper. You set up the scene well by setting it in a familiar but somewhat exotic place, the flight to Brazil. I loved tat line "His eyes, taking her in, burned a pathway between them". Very romantic. 100 words well used.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from Bill Schott
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This story does a nice job of rushing the relationship into a kiss. I count exactly one hundred words as well. The set up is interesting and well told in this abbreviated format.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2014

Comment from royowen
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A lovely entry in this 100 word dash contest! I loved this articulately expressed and well written short story! It was beautifully projected in fine, clear, easy to read narrative,Good luck. Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

Comment from angelface2
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Hm. That seems a little sudden for a first kiss, but what the heck. stranger things have happened. good luck with the contest. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

Comment from Judy Couch
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Very good story. It's well written and easy to read. It sounded like they made a fair trade. I liked the ending. It sort of summed up the transaction.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

Comment from Delahay
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This paints an interesting picture of the interaction of two strangers on a plane who may develop a chance meeting into so much more. A simple ploy to bring about an acquaintance between two people who just happened to meet.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014