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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
YES! Oh, I have a few bullies I'd have liked to have something like that, to. That was a classic, Bill, magic. I really enjoyed this little gem. And it was another contest you should have won! Excellent! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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YES! Oh, I have a few bullies I'd have liked to have something like that, to. That was a classic, Bill, magic. I really enjoyed this little gem. And it was another contest you should have won! Excellent! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I bet this happens a lot.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Bill,
You had me smiling widely at the unexpected ending to the story.
What Choo Lookin' At sure got her come uppance!
Best wishes for the contest. Hope you've had a great week. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hi Bill,
You had me smiling widely at the unexpected ending to the story.
What Choo Lookin' At sure got her come uppance!
Best wishes for the contest. Hope you've had a great week. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Sonali, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from pafaust
What an unexpected, but funny, ending. It is satisfying to see the little, bullied guy come out on top. The words as a weapon imagery was very accurate.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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What an unexpected, but funny, ending. It is satisfying to see the little, bullied guy come out on top. The words as a weapon imagery was very accurate.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, pa, for the excellent review.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
This fifty word submission is excellent. It just goes to show that somewhere down the road, you sins will come back and hit you right between the eyes. I did not see the ending coming. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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This fifty word submission is excellent. It just goes to show that somewhere down the road, you sins will come back and hit you right between the eyes. I did not see the ending coming. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, AMOW, for reviewing this.
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Hey, Bill. You are so very welcome. I enjoyed your little piece. Best of luck.
Comment from Muffins
Revenge is a choice. Do you step into it, feel better for a few minutes or hours then crash realizing you shouldn't have caved in. Do you take the moment, rub your hands together and strike like a snake? It's hard sometimes. As humans, we all dream of righting a wrong. Wilson probably felt like a King before a fallen queen, never able to get this chance to show his power. I wondered was her loan really denied, or did Wilson make something happen?
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Revenge is a choice. Do you step into it, feel better for a few minutes or hours then crash realizing you shouldn't have caved in. Do you take the moment, rub your hands together and strike like a snake? It's hard sometimes. As humans, we all dream of righting a wrong. Wilson probably felt like a King before a fallen queen, never able to get this chance to show his power. I wondered was her loan really denied, or did Wilson make something happen?
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you for reviewing and examining this short piece with such enthusiasm.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh, I loved this. Great led in to the climax. The tension was set with the history that they had between them. Then he delivered the final shot. Great ending and delivery. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Oh, I loved this. Great led in to the climax. The tension was set with the history that they had between them. Then he delivered the final shot. Great ending and delivery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Gretchen, for the excellent review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Bill,
Eeeeek, this guy doesn't mess around! No loan, no interest, not life! Seems reasonable. LOL
Great story. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Hi Bill,
Eeeeek, this guy doesn't mess around! No loan, no interest, not life! Seems reasonable. LOL
Great story. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Jax, for the excellent review.
Comment from dennis0530
A bullet for a bully; couldn't this been more appropriate?
A lifelong bullying shot down in an instant. Cold justice it is; the icy reply surely must have sent shivers to her whole body.
That Wanda wanted a loan shows she must have been desperate to take hold of some cash. At this desperate situation, she was very vulnerable. And what an appropriate time to exact revenge.
As it is said, "An eye for an eye..."
Before, Teddy was in Wanda's sights, now a reversal of roles.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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A bullet for a bully; couldn't this been more appropriate?
A lifelong bullying shot down in an instant. Cold justice it is; the icy reply surely must have sent shivers to her whole body.
That Wanda wanted a loan shows she must have been desperate to take hold of some cash. At this desperate situation, she was very vulnerable. And what an appropriate time to exact revenge.
As it is said, "An eye for an eye..."
Before, Teddy was in Wanda's sights, now a reversal of roles.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Dennis, for the excellent review.
Comment from CR Delport
Oh, sometimes justice can be sweet, especially if it is against a bully like that. I'm sure she regretted all the bullying at that moment. This is very well done. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Oh, sometimes justice can be sweet, especially if it is against a bully like that. I'm sure she regretted all the bullying at that moment. This is very well done. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from adewpearl
zeroing in on the target, he fired - add comma
I love the reveal in your closing line - ah, revenge is sweet. LOL
In so few words you do a great job of creating Wanda's character in a way that we understand completely why Teddy is so gleeful to be able to deny her a loan. :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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zeroing in on the target, he fired - add comma
I love the reveal in your closing line - ah, revenge is sweet. LOL
In so few words you do a great job of creating Wanda's character in a way that we understand completely why Teddy is so gleeful to be able to deny her a loan. :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you for reviewing and the advice.