Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

Nicley and creepliy written. The second line really adds power to this essence poem. The picture is pretty powerful and creepy. As the usualy Dean style!

 Comment Written 01-May-2014

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reply by the author on 01-May-2014

Thanks, Nicci, I'm really pleased to know that you liked it, at least, lol. The voters said otherwise, but it was still fun to do my first "essence poem.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hey Dean.

Jeezzzzzzzz, I hate spiders, and this is the second spidey poem in a row! Your artwork is extraordinary, right down it's breathing little gizzard. You stated it well in the poem too. But, maybe pick a frog to write about the next time. ('-') Frogs are nice.

Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014

Hah, yeah, maybe I'd do better at winning these darn prompts if I did, right? However, I've never been a butterflies and faery dust kinda' guy, as you well know, Jax.

Thanks for your entertaining review, my friend!

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

And it is going to be a very long dirt nap. The fly better hope that that poison numbed it enough to at least fade away in comfort.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Hah, well, I don't know how much "dirt" will be involved, rb, but I guarantee there'll be lots of silk...

Thanks for giving me your spin on this one!

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

So good ! Yet again, I really liked the alliteration with wise widow and the presentation as always was excellent, this should win today ,
Andrew

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Well, we'll see, Andrew. I appreciate that you feel this way at least. However, the voters are saying differently, my friend, lol.

Thanks for you kind comments and review. Much obliged!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

stunning physical presentation of your poem
Six syllables in each line as required
good end-line rhyme of trap nap and internal rhyme of widow pillow
good alliteration
flies nap - flies' nap if you mean plural possessive or fly's nap if you mean singular possessive
love the mood you create and the visual
Brooke

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thanks, Brooke, I really appreciate that. Although it lost by a single vote, the poem was very fun to write. It was the first poem of its kind I had yet to try, and it was truly a learning experience.

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

Well Dean, I don't think this is some of your best work, but what's interesting is, it's still very good. I don't think I have ever seen anyone come close in 'presentatio either. Good luck and best wishes.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thanks, Vic, and it was my first ever attempt at an "essence poem". It was definitely a learning experience, and I will do much better next time out.

reply by victor 66 on 29-Apr-2014

Well Dean, I don't think you need to do 'much better', maybe just a little better. You came very close to a win. It's always interesting to see what readers and reviewers feel about the worked presented here. Have a good day.

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

pretty creepy but good I like your words Wise widow's silken trap soft pillow for flies nap and this so true. thank you for sharing your work

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thank you for read & reviewing my meager offering, donette1914.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

so very well written...and so very true...I love the way you worded this one and the picture is perfect....good luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014

Thanks, I.raven. It's good to know someone liked it, at least, lol...

reply by l.raven on 28-Apr-2014

it was cool...loved it...so welcome...xoox

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Great entry! I like the alliterative effect and the bouncy rhythm. Good rhyme pairs. Clever content with sinister undertones...poor fly may never wake up! Good presentation.
The alliteration of both W and S as well as consonance of P and F are superb.
Good luck!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014

Thank you so much, dear rama. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it!

reply by rama devi on 27-Apr-2014

:-))

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

To the author of Widow's Web. This presentation is fantastic. Your poetic nine word piece is a treat for the reader. Good luck in the contest. Carole

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014

Thank you so much, Carole. I'm really happy to know that you enjoyed it.