Debut Performance
100 word flash24 total reviews
Comment from dbmccarter
This is priceless. I have to admit, I didn't see the ending coming. I can just see the grandmother and her friend when the show starts. Laughed out loud. Congrats on the win.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
This is priceless. I have to admit, I didn't see the ending coming. I can just see the grandmother and her friend when the show starts. Laughed out loud. Congrats on the win.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much.
Comment from amada
I like the tone and the story that goes with it. Those two little ladies will have the time of their life, I hope. Congratulations in winning the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
I like the tone and the story that goes with it. Those two little ladies will have the time of their life, I hope. Congratulations in winning the contest.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Yeah, I bought the ticket for the seat right net to the drama.
Comment from Michaelk
Classic! Great twist. I wonder how the ladies are going to deal with 'the theatre'. I couldn't imagine being the grandson and seeing your grandma in the front row. Great story in just a few words.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
Classic! Great twist. I wonder how the ladies are going to deal with 'the theatre'. I couldn't imagine being the grandson and seeing your grandma in the front row. Great story in just a few words.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Thanks, I agree, the grandson might ruin his 'performance'
and career, but grandma would survive.
Comment from RodG
You definitely deserve to have won this contest. I love how you set the scene and introduce your main character and the conflict through dialog. The ending is delightfully ironic as we discover how naive Grandma is. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
You definitely deserve to have won this contest. I love how you set the scene and introduce your main character and the conflict through dialog. The ending is delightfully ironic as we discover how naive Grandma is. Rod
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks, I could just keep imagining sitting in an adjacent seat while writing.
Comment from boxergirl
Ha! Is Grandmother in for a big surprise. Very humorous story in just one hundred words. I enjoyed it very much and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
Ha! Is Grandmother in for a big surprise. Very humorous story in just one hundred words. I enjoyed it very much and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much. I appreciate the read and feed-back.
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. Grandmother is going to get a shock. She has a front row seat for it. The Chippendale's put on a sexual performance. In the end, I think Grandma will be bragging about Grandsons dancing. Great work.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
I love the picture. I love the story. Grandmother is going to get a shock. She has a front row seat for it. The Chippendale's put on a sexual performance. In the end, I think Grandma will be bragging about Grandsons dancing. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Yeah, she probably will be bragging and making excuses for the nudity. I can hear her now, "If you've got it, flaunt it."
Comment from Twilightspire
Lol. Now that's a surprise for grandma that I'd love to see. This story was smart, funny and entertaining. The picture to go along with it was perfect for the overall theme of the story. Nicely written and good luck with the contest.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
Lol. Now that's a surprise for grandma that I'd love to see. This story was smart, funny and entertaining. The picture to go along with it was perfect for the overall theme of the story. Nicely written and good luck with the contest.
-T.J.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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All through the writing, I wanted to be in the seat next to grandma. Thanks.
Comment from mfowler
When the driver looked at the two old women, I had it! They weren't there to see a play, just to eye off some chiselled pecs (and other stuff). Very funny punchline! Clever topic choice, and well written!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
When the driver looked at the two old women, I had it! They weren't there to see a play, just to eye off some chiselled pecs (and other stuff). Very funny punchline! Clever topic choice, and well written!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks, it was my first clue the women were 'misguided.'
Comment from l.raven
OMG...LOL...this is so cute...I would love to see the look on his face....an would bet this has happened many times...parents seeing their kids in strip clubs...so very well written...love it...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
OMG...LOL...this is so cute...I would love to see the look on his face....an would bet this has happened many times...parents seeing their kids in strip clubs...so very well written...love it...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I used to think about the families of the Playboy centrefold and their reaction to their child on display. Kind of the same. Thanks.
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I so know what you are saying...often wonder what I would do if it were my own??? gurrrrrrrrrrrrrr...LOL so welcome...luff
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of Debut Performance. Now, This is cute. I'm a grandma and my grandson wants to be an actor. I'm old but not that old. I do know about the Chippendales. I have never seen them in a live performance though. Cute ending. Carole
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
To the author of Debut Performance. Now, This is cute. I'm a grandma and my grandson wants to be an actor. I'm old but not that old. I do know about the Chippendales. I have never seen them in a live performance though. Cute ending. Carole
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Can you imagine the nude scenes and how much easier it might be to be naked in front of strangers, rather than family?