Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count for the Lune
great alliteration in restless river rolls
I am laughing myself silly over your clever word play with rolls and bed - this is so witty and funny :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thanks Brooke, I enjoyed writing this one, so glad it gave you a good laugh.
Good night, Carolyn

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Restless river rolls
yet seldom
falls out of the bed

LOL. . .as you have referenced the Mississippi. . .

but when she does
overflow the confines of her bed
she covers the land
liker bedding!
8-)

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014

Yes, the old Mississippi wets more than her bed when spring floods come. Thank you for this delightful review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Great title... I really like this! Great photo to enhance your carefully chosen words for this poem.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers * Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014

Thanks Jax,
I am glad you liked Rivers Roll, I had almost forgotten I entered. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

This amusing and fun short poem tell it's truth in a play on words. It is easy to picture the rolling river rushing down through it's river bed. But it does at time fall out. We call those times floods.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014

Thank you WardHays for your fine comments. You are so right, floods do happen. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

good luck in the contest.

I love the upper Mississippi. Actually, the lower part too. The middle, south of the Missouri River kind of puts me to sleep though

Sometimes, it does fall out of bed or at least out of its banks.

:)

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

And that is a fact, at times it actually 'breaks the bank'. :0 Thanks for this great review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is wonderfully written with just a touch of humor that brings a smile to the lips of the reader. Technically sound it is the message that makes it such a delight. Nicely done and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

And thank you for reading and reviewing, as usual you are of great encouragement to me. :-) Carolyn

Comment from The Death

Exceptional

Hi,
This is an exceptional piece!!

You have written this one very cleverly.
It is true and funny.
Loved the last line.
I am sure it will be in the top three.:)

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

That would be super to be in the top 3, I like your prediction and that you liked Rivers Roll. The award of the six is awesome. :-) Carolyn

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

I love this reminds me of the rivers we used to fish in back home. peace and tranquility is my way of thinking just sit the in a chair with a line out waiting for the fish to bite

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

That is pretty much what we were doing the day I took the picture. We had lunch on the sandy bank. So glad you liked this one and thanks for the wonderful review. :-) Carolyn

reply by country ranch writer on 30-Jan-2014

WELCOME

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

This is a scream and similar to an example I read that also had a play on words. Great use of alliteration in line one;
assonance with yet and bed. consonance with falls and rolls.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014

I am glad you enjoyed this one, it was fun to write. :-) Carolyn

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

This is a very clever 5/7/5, Carolyn. Rolls but doesn't ball out of bed! I like it ... a lot! :)

This is an excellent entry for Lune contest. Very nice alliteration with "restless river rolls".

Best wishes for the contest, Carolyn!

Connie :)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014

Thanks Connie, I appreciate the comments, it would be fun to win. :-) Carolyn