The big Bang
An exploding universe.11 total reviews
Comment from CreativeXXXX
A good 5-7-5 poem which follows the conventions correctly. An interesting and controversial topic, which we don't know the answers to. Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
A good 5-7-5 poem which follows the conventions correctly. An interesting and controversial topic, which we don't know the answers to. Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the great review and comments,
Comment from nelliesellie
I am hoping it will keep banging. We are just beginning to explore the rest of the universe. We really have not explored the world like we should. Humans know only a tiny bit of the miracles that are out there. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
I am hoping it will keep banging. We are just beginning to explore the rest of the universe. We really have not explored the world like we should. Humans know only a tiny bit of the miracles that are out there. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
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thanks for the great review,
Comment from tfawcus
This is a great combination of picture and poem to create the image. It is hard to imagine this eternally expanding universe. I wonder what lies beyond the space it is filling?
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
This is a great combination of picture and poem to create the image. It is hard to imagine this eternally expanding universe. I wonder what lies beyond the space it is filling?
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014
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to answer your question More space. Thanks for the great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your 5-7-5 has the required components
the three line count
the required 17 syllable count
your few words allow the reader to see and feel the image of the world starting with a bang and continuing to expand
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
good luck in the contest
your 5-7-5 has the required components
the three line count
the required 17 syllable count
your few words allow the reader to see and feel the image of the world starting with a bang and continuing to expand
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review and best wishes.
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welcome...SC
Comment from skye
Your choice of art is dramatic, tying the perfect haiku together. The big bang theory that continues to expand is a great subject for this contest.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
Your choice of art is dramatic, tying the perfect haiku together. The big bang theory that continues to expand is a great subject for this contest.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review.
Comment from in777wr#
Yes the universe appears to be expanding everyday. Your poem reads, and flows well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. I enjoyed reading this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
Yes the universe appears to be expanding everyday. Your poem reads, and flows well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. I enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review I appreciate it.
Comment from Leineco
started with a bang
will continue to expand
the whole universe
you betch'ya! Nice use of the form :-)
(personally, I like the idea of fading out, better than being squished! LOL
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
started with a bang
will continue to expand
the whole universe
you betch'ya! Nice use of the form :-)
(personally, I like the idea of fading out, better than being squished! LOL
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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I suppose, but we wont be around. thanks for the review
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is very true. Very good 5-7-5 poem for the contest. It has the perfect syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
This is very true. Very good 5-7-5 poem for the contest. It has the perfect syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from zanya
And so it is - the 'big bang' or at least we are told it was thus- and it continues its onward march 'expand' - and a superb pic
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
And so it is - the 'big bang' or at least we are told it was thus- and it continues its onward march 'expand' - and a superb pic
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review
Comment from rhonny
i like this poem. it speaks of a mystery we can't fathom let alone solve. your words draw us into the realms of wonder. your words and lines flow well.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
i like this poem. it speaks of a mystery we can't fathom let alone solve. your words draw us into the realms of wonder. your words and lines flow well.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
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:)