Comment from seaglass

Excellent

Your quatrain poem is in line with criteria. Your picture represents the subject and sets the mood. It's difficult to paint a picture in a short-short poem, following rules of rhyme, but you did it well. I use to chased dust demons as a child but never caught one. good luck in contest

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

They are illusive little boogers aren't they? :-) So glad you enjoyed this one and that it brought back fond memories. Carolyn

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I suppose there is a reason for it but I'm blowed if I can see what it is either! Anyway, like your poem, it makes some lovely patterns amongst the sand dunes!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thanks for your comments. :-) Carolyn

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

Evocative and enjoyable read. I live in Australia and have often visited the sandy desert areas. as kids, we called the Dust Devils "sand dancers". Even on a seemingly still day they would appear out of nowhere, whirl briefly and then disappear. Cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Hi there and thanks so much for this great review. I enjoyed the info on 'sand dancers'. We have several writers from Australia, I would love to visit there someday. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Four really lovely lines in almost mono rhyme. This is so good that it is a pity you did not write more stanzas like this. 'Dust Devil, phantom of the land' - good use of metaphor. I wish you luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014

Thank you Dorothy for this great review. You may be right, I could have made this longer. (Hindsight, as they say, is clearer than foresight. LOL) :-) Carolyn

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Hey Carolyn, this is indeed an awesome Quantrain poem. I like the construction of this Quantrain, it reads well and produces good imagery and movement like the shifting sands of a desert.
Cheers,
Sylvia

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014

Hi there, thanks for a great review of this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Desert sands,indeed the golden sand. that's a very nice expressed poem,nice rhyme, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

Thanks again for this wonderful review. I appreciate you always, Carolyn

reply by lakeport on 08-Jan-2014

your welcome, Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good complimentary photo. Good ending rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with round/found. Good alliteration with rhyme/reason...dust/devil. Good brief message that I see no adjustments being made. Good work.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

I appeciate your comments more than you can know. Thank you, Carolyn

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

interesting aaab rhyme scheme in your quatrain
good alliteration in rhyme or reason and in dust devil
vivid detail of setting that pairs beautifully with your illustration
you also create mood well
Brooke

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

Thanks Brooke for the favorable comments. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Very nicely written,, and a great entry into the contest,,, your picture is a perfect match or your poem,,, well one,,, good luck in the contest,,blessings sueellen

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for your encouragement and comments. :-) Carolyn

Comment from brittanydawngray

Excellent

First of all, I wish you the best of luck in the Quatrain Poetry Contest. I like the fact that you picked nature to write about, and it's unique that you picked the desert which is another quality that I enjoyed. Again, Best of luck, and keep writing.

Best wishes,

Brittany Dawn Gray

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014

Thank you Brittany Dawn, I appreciate your wonderful review and best wishes. :-) Carolyn