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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Embers Of Lenore"Song lyrics with music attached
23 total reviews
Comment from pattipac
I'm out of sixes or I would plant one on your lovely poem. Like the way you contrast your enduring love for Lenore with the fames of a outdoor fire. Now that she is no longer with you, you gain comfort from memories' warmth.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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I'm out of sixes or I would plant one on your lovely poem. Like the way you contrast your enduring love for Lenore with the fames of a outdoor fire. Now that she is no longer with you, you gain comfort from memories' warmth.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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thoughtful review. very much appreciated. your thoughts of a six will do just fine. thank you very much. mike
Comment from denhagan
This is a nice poem, written in the free verse style, about memories of a previous love that the author wants to leave behind. Nice picture to go with the poem.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a nice poem, written in the free verse style, about memories of a previous love that the author wants to leave behind. Nice picture to go with the poem.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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thank you very much for the nice review. mike
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You're welcome Mike,
Dennis
Comment from ravenblack
Damn! You definitely earned the win with this one. Would six it , but I'm just about out and I sixed you yesterday. Great wit with this one, love gone coals that served their purpose, the ache still smouldering but why put them out? They are hard-earned battle scars and you are left with memories of Lenore, a wistful smile on the shore knowing more Lenores will come- and grateful for it.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Damn! You definitely earned the win with this one. Would six it , but I'm just about out and I sixed you yesterday. Great wit with this one, love gone coals that served their purpose, the ache still smouldering but why put them out? They are hard-earned battle scars and you are left with memories of Lenore, a wistful smile on the shore knowing more Lenores will come- and grateful for it.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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this is one that is finished and said; "that is pretty damn good". so, glad you liked it too. I seldom like my own stuff. perfect description of what I was going for. much thanks, mike
Comment from Cookie333
Well...I need to visit your portfolio every now and then. This one escaped my hawk eye. I congratulate you Mike, this one meets, nay, exceeds the prompt. Love definitely up in smoke here.
thanks
karen
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Well...I need to visit your portfolio every now and then. This one escaped my hawk eye. I congratulate you Mike, this one meets, nay, exceeds the prompt. Love definitely up in smoke here.
thanks
karen
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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thank you. I was surprised at the response to my little song though I secretly thought it was pretty good. mike
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Nicely said, clean and neat the raging fire persists to burn until it is completely out. No it isn't kindness to pour a pail of water on embers having yet more to expunge by burning out naturally. Reference to Lenore can say it all!
I didn't see any spelling errors or grammatical ones.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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Nicely said, clean and neat the raging fire persists to burn until it is completely out. No it isn't kindness to pour a pail of water on embers having yet more to expunge by burning out naturally. Reference to Lenore can say it all!
I didn't see any spelling errors or grammatical ones.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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very well thought out comments and review. much appreciated. thank you very much. mike
Comment from 9999pool
many have written about a lost love but this one stands out for a few reasons.
Firstly, the love as in a flame - should it be doused for good now that the ember is dying? Let it turn to ashes and learnt to live again.
Secondly, tracing Lenore on the sand was a metaphor that for the very last time, her name will be mentioned and when the the tide comes in later - all will be washed and forgotten, taking Lenore with it. And of course, that will make Donna one happy lady to have gotten rid of Lenore forever.
Thirdly, the imagery of the flame of love and the embers are great metaphors of a lost love.
Excellent write and deserves to win the contest. Three cheerios.
Best, Ritchie. :))
Have a great Sunday!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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many have written about a lost love but this one stands out for a few reasons.
Firstly, the love as in a flame - should it be doused for good now that the ember is dying? Let it turn to ashes and learnt to live again.
Secondly, tracing Lenore on the sand was a metaphor that for the very last time, her name will be mentioned and when the the tide comes in later - all will be washed and forgotten, taking Lenore with it. And of course, that will make Donna one happy lady to have gotten rid of Lenore forever.
Thirdly, the imagery of the flame of love and the embers are great metaphors of a lost love.
Excellent write and deserves to win the contest. Three cheerios.
Best, Ritchie. :))
Have a great Sunday!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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wow. that is a wonderful and encouraging review. you have made my day! I am so happy that you understand my piece in every way. that just delights me. I was very surprised to win the contest to be honest. I suppose my meaning was as clear as I dreamed it might be. thank you so very much. warmest regards, mike
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Hi Mike,
Sometimes we thought that word weaved, great vocabulary and lines can win.
Not many knew that the presentation of the story's essence is the true art.
The imagery and metaphor were all there.
This story is very close to your heart and you write your heart in it, smiles. mark me if I am wrong, :)).
have a great Sunday. For once I agreed the judges' decision is correct, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Have a great Sunday!!
Comment from ruminative scribbler
So sad! And beautifully expressed through use of some stunning imagery.
The last stanza seems to suggests that these memories are somewhat bitter-sweet.
Congratulations on winning the contest - i am not at all surprised ;)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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So sad! And beautifully expressed through use of some stunning imagery.
The last stanza seems to suggests that these memories are somewhat bitter-sweet.
Congratulations on winning the contest - i am not at all surprised ;)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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thank you very much. I was quite surprised to be honest. hahaha! high praise and encouraging words. most appreciated, mike
Comment from Glasstruth
A love gone that dies in the ashes. Very lyrical, romantic and oh so sad. To think one could just "pour a pail of cold water" is sudden, but he memory still remains. Like the arrangement of your lines. Superb! Les
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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A love gone that dies in the ashes. Very lyrical, romantic and oh so sad. To think one could just "pour a pail of cold water" is sudden, but he memory still remains. Like the arrangement of your lines. Superb! Les
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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glad you liked this. sometimes I worry that song lyrics might not stand on their own without the music. so, I am pleased to hear your excellent review. very encouraging. regards, mike
Comment from Supe
I can certainly see this as a long. Put some music to it...I was going to wish you well in the contest, but you won. Congratulations. Nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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I can certainly see this as a long. Put some music to it...I was going to wish you well in the contest, but you won. Congratulations. Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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it is a song. I did win! big shock for me. very kind and encouraging remarks. most appreciated. thank you, mike
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
Nice job, MC. Thanks for sharing. It is sad..but words well spoken. THis is really nice work. Keep it up and keep sharing. THe last stanza is my favorite, it really brings it all from feelings to a mental image for me.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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Nice job, MC. Thanks for sharing. It is sad..but words well spoken. THis is really nice work. Keep it up and keep sharing. THe last stanza is my favorite, it really brings it all from feelings to a mental image for me.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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wonderful encouraging words. thank you for your thoughtful review. very much appreciated. mike