Pampered Pet
Things are never what they seem.32 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
great work my friend it is so sad how some children have it all and others have nothing great write i loved it thank you gazzaxx
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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great work my friend it is so sad how some children have it all and others have nothing great write i loved it thank you gazzaxx
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Gazza! I'm pleased you liked it, we never know the underlying reasons or circumstances for a childs behaviour. Thank you for the nice comments. xsx
Comment from c_lucas
Some children do not get as much attention as the family's pet. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Some children do not get as much attention as the family's pet. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your lovely review! I am so pleased you enjoyed it.Xsx
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You're welcome, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from Curly Girly
A lovely poem about a spoilt boy. Well written. I enjoyed your image and layout too. The rhythm and rhyme was good. I am sure it will do very well. I see no need of obvious corrections. CG.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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A lovely poem about a spoilt boy. Well written. I enjoyed your image and layout too. The rhythm and rhyme was good. I am sure it will do very well. I see no need of obvious corrections. CG.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you for this lovely review, CG, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. xsx
Comment from rhymelord
Deaer Sandra,
Good solid metre and excellent rhyme. I gather from the last stanza that you are sekking some excuses for the brat's general behaviour and I am sure that in so many cases it is the parents fault, not the kid's. I am a firm believer in "nurture NOT Nature". Good luck in the comp..
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Deaer Sandra,
Good solid metre and excellent rhyme. I gather from the last stanza that you are sekking some excuses for the brat's general behaviour and I am sure that in so many cases it is the parents fault, not the kid's. I am a firm believer in "nurture NOT Nature". Good luck in the comp..
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Reg for your lovely review, and for the good luck wishes. I do believe that in the majority of cases, not all, that parents are at fault when it comes to the behavior of their children. Lack of love, giving material things as a substitute for their own inadequacies to provide the love children need. I know there are lots of reasons and some just stem down to the child having a nasty streak in them. Fortunately I was blessed with wonderful parents and also blessed with wonderful sons.
Don't I keep on!!!!! Thank you again, Reg, your words are so appreciated. xsx Sandra.
Comment from Bina1
What a sad spoiled little kid! A very well written poem, thank you for sharing. A fine entry for the contest, good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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What a sad spoiled little kid! A very well written poem, thank you for sharing. A fine entry for the contest, good luck!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Bina, for your lovely review! I'm realy pleased you enjoyed it. Sandra xsx
Comment from Tina McKala
The end of a poem gave it a nice and unexpected twist. I liked that you showed that everything has some reason. The poem itself was great, when it comes to its structure, rhymes or flow! I really liked it! Tina
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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The end of a poem gave it a nice and unexpected twist. I liked that you showed that everything has some reason. The poem itself was great, when it comes to its structure, rhymes or flow! I really liked it! Tina
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you Tina, for the lovely review and nice comments!! I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! xsx
Comment from Gloria ....
This is very well written poem sandra. It made me feel pretty sad for the poor young fella. Being rendered invisible is about the worst thing a young child or any aged person for that matter can feel. Your rhyme scheme is good, cadence great, a different tone and overall very nicely done.
I wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This is very well written poem sandra. It made me feel pretty sad for the poor young fella. Being rendered invisible is about the worst thing a young child or any aged person for that matter can feel. Your rhyme scheme is good, cadence great, a different tone and overall very nicely done.
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovey review, and for your kind best wishes! I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Sandra. xsx
Comment from Charlene0513
A lovely poem expressing the benefits of mannerism.
This world would be a lot better off if it was made mandatory for everyone to receive with a grateful attitude.
Charlene
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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A lovely poem expressing the benefits of mannerism.
This world would be a lot better off if it was made mandatory for everyone to receive with a grateful attitude.
Charlene
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Charlene for reading and reviewing my poem, I am so pleased you enjoyed it, and thank you so much for your lovely comments! Sandra. xsx
Comment from bossladyone
I love it. The emotion expressed in the poem is great. The picture and color scheme add to the impact of the poem giving it more depth. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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I love it. The emotion expressed in the poem is great. The picture and color scheme add to the impact of the poem giving it more depth. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Bless you!! Thank you for your lovely review, bossladyone!! I am so pleased you enjoyed the story and thank you so much for the super 6 stars! Sandra. xsx
Comment from adewpearl
excellent rhyming couplets including good proximate rhymes like own/home and sauce/course
good alliteration in pampered pet
lot's of strawberry - drop the apostrophe
good consonance of L sounds in lonely friendless child
a thoughtful story about why some children are spoiled by parents who have money to throw at them but no attention to give
Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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excellent rhyming couplets including good proximate rhymes like own/home and sauce/course
good alliteration in pampered pet
lot's of strawberry - drop the apostrophe
good consonance of L sounds in lonely friendless child
a thoughtful story about why some children are spoiled by parents who have money to throw at them but no attention to give
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Brooke for this lovely review. I have removed the apostrophe, thank you for that!! Sandra. xsx