Hedgerow Tales
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Reggie the Rat is in Danger!"Book 3 in the Hedgerow Series
42 total reviews
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Sandra:)
This is quite a good lesson in environmental concers for children. It has a good rhyme and cadence that shoud appeal to children and be easy to understand and remember.
I didn't see this in time for the contest, but it would have gotten my vote. Keep up the good writing.
Roger
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi Sandra:)
This is quite a good lesson in environmental concers for children. It has a good rhyme and cadence that shoud appeal to children and be easy to understand and remember.
I didn't see this in time for the contest, but it would have gotten my vote. Keep up the good writing.
Roger
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful review and super 6 stars, Roger! That is so kind of you, I am so pleased you enjoyed the poem, thank you! xsx
Comment from Christina 201
I love your style and your fun characters. You maintain our interest by creating an air of mystery. What has happened? What has caused it? Good message clearly portrayed. Excellent.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I love your style and your fun characters. You maintain our interest by creating an air of mystery. What has happened? What has caused it? Good message clearly portrayed. Excellent.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for this amazing review and super 6 stars!! I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you! xsx
Comment from justatuna
I'm very glad I read this. I've read several of these contest entries. This is definitely one of the best. You did a great job with meter, imagery and rhymes. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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I'm very glad I read this. I've read several of these contest entries. This is definitely one of the best. You did a great job with meter, imagery and rhymes. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for you very kind and lovely review, Justatuna, I am so pleased you liked it, thank you! xsx
Comment from Cornelius2000
Even with a charming name like "Reggie" I have a bit of trouble sympathizing with a rat, but I get the point of the poem. Would you consider changing it to "Reggie the Gopher?" Gophers are kind of cute, and as far as I know, don't spread the Black Plague. It might be more appropriate for children.
I found your meter to be pretty good until it bogged down in the last couple of lines, with too many words. But your rhyming is PERFECT....and I appreciate perefect rhyming.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Even with a charming name like "Reggie" I have a bit of trouble sympathizing with a rat, but I get the point of the poem. Would you consider changing it to "Reggie the Gopher?" Gophers are kind of cute, and as far as I know, don't spread the Black Plague. It might be more appropriate for children.
I found your meter to be pretty good until it bogged down in the last couple of lines, with too many words. But your rhyming is PERFECT....and I appreciate perefect rhyming.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your lovely review, Cornelius! You obviously don't know Reggie! He is one of my main characters in my forth coming book, Hedgerow Capers, I used him because all the children (and many adults here) know and love him. He is part of a gang of six, Timmy and Tommy Mouse, Cyril the Squirrel, Millie the Mole and Vicky the Vole. Other critters come into each of the different stories, even a cat is good friends with them and Bodger the Beaver. There are many friends, all different species but they are all friends and help each other. Reggie is the one that is always getting hurt, and always needing help. There are 3 books in the series, and going great guns. I still might bring a Gopher into the stories though, he could make friends with my Whiffy the Weasel, lol!! Thank you again, for you lovely review and wonderful compliment on my rhyming! Sandra. xsx
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Sandra...thanks for explaining about Reggie. I'm pleased to hear that your books are doing well. It's a tough business. Dave
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
sandra, this has an excellent flow with with your rhymes. the theme of this contest is given meaning through your message. sandra, you have done a great job in writing this great piece of poetry. good luck my friend in this contest,,,,,,jim xx
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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sandra, this has an excellent flow with with your rhymes. the theme of this contest is given meaning through your message. sandra, you have done a great job in writing this great piece of poetry. good luck my friend in this contest,,,,,,jim xx
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much my dear friend! It didn't win, but was received well. I am so pleased you read and reviewed and liked my story, Jim, your words always mean a lot to me. I hope you are regaining your health, and are a lot happier now. It's so hard to bounce back when you feel so down. But I am praying for you, and I am sure the old Jim with all his enthusiasm for life will soon be back. Thank you again, Jim!! Sandra. xsx
Comment from Anthony Crosbie
Hi Sandra
This is a great fun poem that gets the message across really well. Kids will love this and it'll really make them think twice about littering. It skips along beautifully and is more than a poem - it's a wonderful kids story.
Archie x
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Hi Sandra
This is a great fun poem that gets the message across really well. Kids will love this and it'll really make them think twice about littering. It skips along beautifully and is more than a poem - it's a wonderful kids story.
Archie x
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovely review you have given my story, Archie. I wrote it for a contest, and was only alowed 20 lines. I am thinking of adding a couple more verses to bring the message home in a nice way. Oh, it didn't win, but didn't let itself down either! Thank you again!! Sandra.
Comment from Spitfire
Although this is well down, I'm not sympathetic toward saving a rat. Reggie Raccoon is a lovable critter, but a rat? But I do think the use of animals would appeal to children more than some of the other entries.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Although this is well down, I'm not sympathetic toward saving a rat. Reggie Raccoon is a lovable critter, but a rat? But I do think the use of animals would appeal to children more than some of the other entries.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Spitfire. I used Reggie the Rat because he is a character in my Hedgerow series and he is always getting into trouble. Funnily enough, lots of adults have a soft spot for him to, and the children love him. In hindsight, I think I should have used another of the characters to highlight the problem of rubbish in the woodlands. Thank you again for the lovely review! Sandra. xsx
Comment from Titanx9
This is a beautiful and thoughtful piece of writing that talks about pollution and how human's inconsiderate habits are maiming or killing the denizens of the forests, the sea and other places. I wish you luck in the contest with this well-written poem.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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This is a beautiful and thoughtful piece of writing that talks about pollution and how human's inconsiderate habits are maiming or killing the denizens of the forests, the sea and other places. I wish you luck in the contest with this well-written poem.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Titanx9, and for wishing me luck! I really am pleased you enjoyed it. Sandra. xsx
Comment from oozer
Enjoyed this too much to be too worried about the plight of Reggie. Somehow sensed I was being taken for a jaunty ride. I too like to write in this meter you use. In my view it is a cheerful rhythm. I sometimes write rather sombre verses in the same and wonder if this rhythm is appropriate for such.
I would love you to use the word 'chugarum' sometime in one of these these so charming verses of yours. Thanks and Take
care.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Enjoyed this too much to be too worried about the plight of Reggie. Somehow sensed I was being taken for a jaunty ride. I too like to write in this meter you use. In my view it is a cheerful rhythm. I sometimes write rather sombre verses in the same and wonder if this rhythm is appropriate for such.
I would love you to use the word 'chugarum' sometime in one of these these so charming verses of yours. Thanks and Take
care.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Now you have me intrigued, I love the sound of 'Chugarum' and would really love to use it in my next 'Hedgerow' story. BUT what is a Chugarum???? Is it an expression like Cyril the Squirrel's 'tickity boo'? or is it an animal? Let me know and I will put it in. I am so pleased you enjoyed the story, (Reggie is always in trouble) I have read and reviewed some of your poems, and I think the meter suits both if the story flows in the way the words demand. My stanzas are usually 6 lines long, and there are normally more of them. After the contest is finished I will be adding more of them so that it is the same as the others. Thank you so much for your lovely review, I am really pleased you enjoyed it. xsx Sandra.
Comment from Carrie Carson
Great job in relaying a story from animal point of view, adventurous, too with the danger...good hook.
No spag, good form.
Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Great job in relaying a story from animal point of view, adventurous, too with the danger...good hook.
No spag, good form.
Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this really lovely review, Carrie! I am pleased you enjoyed it and thank you for the 'good luck!' Sandra. xsx