Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a terrific monotetra poem. I am enjoying reading all the entries to this contest. I have not seen this form before. I love your hero poem. Where's superman or batman?

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks for the nice review.
Steve

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

I like the monotetra! I am going to study it some so I will bookcase all of them to study later. This one is cute. I like King Arthur and knights and English Tea! Thank you for a fun poem. Honeycomb Good Luck

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012

Thank you for the nice review.
Steve

Comment from KC

Exceptional

Hi - great poem for kids (and us adults of course!). I loved the rhyme, the content and the ending. This has now inpired me to write something similar (I wrote one about teddy bears - but its a bit long). Keep up the good work. KC

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012

Thank you very much for the positive review and for the six stars.
Steve

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

this was such fun - the way you captured kids' scattered play (which all makes sense at the time of course) - and seeing how suddenly the inspirations can change or cease, to pay attention to yummy everyday things! Fun.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012

Thank you - this didn't quite turn out how I wanted it to, but you get the idea...
Steve

Comment from Warren Rodgers

Excellent

Hi Steve,
Your Monotetra is written in great rhyme and meter, as I knew you would, and the poem is very entertaining and clever. Interesting how you combined different stories into one poem in which a young boy would dream of being the hero. Good luck to you in the contest!
all my best, warren

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012

Thanks, Warren - I knew I would get well beaten in this - the idea was sound but the execution just didn't pan out how I wanted...
Steve

Comment from tinams

Excellent

A very fine children's poem. You have adhered to the Childrens' Monotetra writing prompt guidelines and produced a worthy entry. Good Luck :) Tina

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012

Thanks, Tina.

Comment from Jane Johnson

Excellent

Nicely written. I'm getting to recognize you from the repeating lines at the end of each stanza, which you do quite effectively. Nice artwork and imagery. The words flowed well and it had nice rhythm. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks, Jane - I'm glad you enjoyed this. This time the repeating lines were demanded by the Monotetra form.
Steve

Comment from jackpeg

Exceptional

I like this immensely! What a merry cadence you've put into it. Sally Carter just posted one with the same repetitive final line to each stanza. Very inventive of each of you.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you - I thought Sally's was superb. The repeating line was part of the required Monotetra form. Adewpearl and Warren Rogers also posted super entries.
Steve

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, kiwi, you did a great job writing this montera about the stories of yesteryear that can be found at tea time. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thanks for the review.
Steve

Comment from Meta~Mark

Excellent

wow..this poem is fantastic..we have Scotland yard and Robin Hood and riddles and tomfoolery aplenty. excellent write her friend..

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012

Thank you so much for the kind review.
Steve