Veil of Secrets
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Veil of Secrets - Chap 10"Mystery/Crime and Ghosts
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Comment from Jacob1395
Sorry to hear that you aren't well, Carol, I've been ill myself the last couple of weeks so I haven't been as active on Fanstory as I would've liked, but I'm starting to get better now. This is another engaging and excellent chapter in your book, I really enjoyed it.
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Sorry to hear that you aren't well, Carol, I've been ill myself the last couple of weeks so I haven't been as active on Fanstory as I would've liked, but I'm starting to get better now. This is another engaging and excellent chapter in your book, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I didn't see any mistakes Carol just plenty of tension as Grayson shows he is just like Cornelius. Hope you are feeling much better soon.
Cheers
Valda
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I didn't see any mistakes Carol just plenty of tension as Grayson shows he is just like Cornelius. Hope you are feeling much better soon.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
Comment from karenina
Too bad your chapters never have anything exciting or dramatic in them (she said with a wink).
Lots happening and worse of all while I've been largely absent for a few days you've been sick?
Sorry to hear that, Carol!
If it kept YOU in bed it must have been one heck of a bug!
Don't think about giving up on this... I know you'll find a way to solve the evil doings.
You always do!
It hope Phil makes it...
Karenina
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Too bad your chapters never have anything exciting or dramatic in them (she said with a wink).
Lots happening and worse of all while I've been largely absent for a few days you've been sick?
Sorry to hear that, Carol!
If it kept YOU in bed it must have been one heck of a bug!
Don't think about giving up on this... I know you'll find a way to solve the evil doings.
You always do!
It hope Phil makes it...
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
It looks bad for the lawyer, Phil, who has all the papers and the knowledge of her inheritance, but even the lawyer isn't, as always it seems Donatelli is a trifle late in intercepting the thugs thst like to use cars in apprehending their targets, well done, Carol, blessings Roy
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It looks bad for the lawyer, Phil, who has all the papers and the knowledge of her inheritance, but even the lawyer isn't, as always it seems Donatelli is a trifle late in intercepting the thugs thst like to use cars in apprehending their targets, well done, Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
Sorry to hear you are sick. Your writing is excellent, and the chapter an engrossing one. They were lucky to get away in time before the cops arrived. Hope Phil pulls through!!
Wendy
Edit: confronted him/ (needs a full stop not forward dash)
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Sorry to hear you are sick. Your writing is excellent, and the chapter an engrossing one. They were lucky to get away in time before the cops arrived. Hope Phil pulls through!!
Wendy
Edit: confronted him/ (needs a full stop not forward dash)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol.
Good to see you back my friend. This story is coming along. It appears Donatelli has his hands full again chasing bad guys. I hope the lawyer lives.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
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Carol.
Good to see you back my friend. This story is coming along. It appears Donatelli has his hands full again chasing bad guys. I hope the lawyer lives.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You are remarkable for someone under the weather. I didn't find a single error, although I get so deep into reading the story I could have missed something. Phil was so upset about Althea's son he tried to convince her to call the police, but, of course, she can't. Then Phil is trying to save his own life as he is attacked and some of his papers about Althea were taken. You get well soon, you're in my prayers.
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You are remarkable for someone under the weather. I didn't find a single error, although I get so deep into reading the story I could have missed something. Phil was so upset about Althea's son he tried to convince her to call the police, but, of course, she can't. Then Phil is trying to save his own life as he is attacked and some of his papers about Althea were taken. You get well soon, you're in my prayers.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
A lot happens in all of your chapters. Like the others, this chapter is filled with new information and action. You skillfully arouse the emotions of the reader. An example is...Eleanor tells Donnatelli there will be a car accident. As we read an SUV is slamming into Henderson's car, we feel anxious for Donnatelli to arrive. Great writing that generates feelings.
We missed you. I'm glad you're back, but now you have a big mess to straighten out with these characters. Looking forward to reading how you do it.
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A lot happens in all of your chapters. Like the others, this chapter is filled with new information and action. You skillfully arouse the emotions of the reader. An example is...Eleanor tells Donnatelli there will be a car accident. As we read an SUV is slamming into Henderson's car, we feel anxious for Donnatelli to arrive. Great writing that generates feelings.
We missed you. I'm glad you're back, but now you have a big mess to straighten out with these characters. Looking forward to reading how you do it.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is the perfect example of people willing to do anything to protect their interests, and I mean anything. But I know the writer, and she's never going to let that happen. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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This is the perfect example of people willing to do anything to protect their interests, and I mean anything. But I know the writer, and she's never going to let that happen. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I don't know if it's because the writer has been so sick or if she's just getting old, but I've had second thoughts about this story in the last few days. It has gotten much darker than I intended and now there's no way out but either give it the boot or plod through the mess. Knowing me...I'll keep plodding just because I hate to let the bad guys win. Thanks so much for always being so supportive.
Hugs, Carol
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LOL. I have no doubt you'll figure a way out of the maze. Your ability to negotiate and alter paths is the key to your successes. :-) Hugs back at you! Ric
Comment from Carol Clark2
Grayson seems like he's pure evil, having Phil run off the road. I'm glad Eleanor 'saw' the accident and warned Donatelli it was going to happen. This chapter is action-packed. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Grayson seems like he's pure evil, having Phil run off the road. I'm glad Eleanor 'saw' the accident and warned Donatelli it was going to happen. This chapter is action-packed. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much Carol. I'm having second thoughts about this book because it's gotten far more evil than I had intended and now there's no way out but to finish or give the whole thing the boot. I've been so sick the last few days and now I am so far behind and my brain is friend. Thanks for reading and supporting me.
Hugs, Carol
Hope you are feeling better.
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I'm sorry you've been sick. Prayers for healing and for wisdom about your book.
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I'm feeling much better, thanks. I hope you are too. Hugs!
