Veil of Secrets
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13 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
I hope someone is nearby Yto warn Rebecca about trusting Grayson Webb. What a scoundrel! It's interesting that his grandfather wants to take him down and take back his land. Then there's Althea, with her missing .son. Suggestion: "Mommy, I want to come home (.) I see althea's also related to Rebecca. Yes, this is a tangled web. Good chapter. Thanks for the character listing. It helps lots. Blessings. Carol
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I hope someone is nearby Yto warn Rebecca about trusting Grayson Webb. What a scoundrel! It's interesting that his grandfather wants to take him down and take back his land. Then there's Althea, with her missing .son. Suggestion: "Mommy, I want to come home (.) I see althea's also related to Rebecca. Yes, this is a tangled web. Good chapter. Thanks for the character listing. It helps lots. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
Ah there is another web of intrigue being woven, and another complex chapter being written in the annals of the mysterious vineyard and it's connections, even ghostly ancestors after the tangled inheritance, for the offspring, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
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Ah there is another web of intrigue being woven, and another complex chapter being written in the annals of the mysterious vineyard and it's connections, even ghostly ancestors after the tangled inheritance, for the offspring, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
Looks like there is going to be a few more missing people other than just Travis before we know it. LOL. Okay, so that probably isn't funny, but you know me. Thanks for sharing.
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Looks like there is going to be a few more missing people other than just Travis before we know it. LOL. Okay, so that probably isn't funny, but you know me. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well now, Carol.
A battle of the ghosts brewing, the kidnapping intrigue grows and still no sign of the missing judge.
This has all the markings of some sort of crimne mystery thing going on.
I love it
Tim x
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Well now, Carol.
A battle of the ghosts brewing, the kidnapping intrigue grows and still no sign of the missing judge.
This has all the markings of some sort of crimne mystery thing going on.
I love it
Tim x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Jacob1395
I could really feel the anger in Conrelius' voice when he was talking to Grayson. I love how you keep the tension ticking up a notch with each scene and you do this really well. Another excellent piece, Carol, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I could really feel the anger in Conrelius' voice when he was talking to Grayson. I love how you keep the tension ticking up a notch with each scene and you do this really well. Another excellent piece, Carol, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Jacob. Coming from a fellow mystery and crime writer I definitely appreciate your thoughts on the story. This one has a lot of plots being entertwined with the others so I hope I can hold it together and not get lost myself. Appreciate the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This is a fabulous chapter to your book. You have got all sorts of action going on. I am curious to see what comes next. Keep writing my friend.
Love ya lots,
Cecilia
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Carol,
This is a fabulous chapter to your book. You have got all sorts of action going on. I am curious to see what comes next. Keep writing my friend.
Love ya lots,
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Althea is in a lot of trouble, and really needs to speak to Rebecca or Garth. If Eleanor could find her that would be a big help and a better way to find Travis. I know, she can't annoy the mob, she might not see her son again.
Then, that idiot Grayson, if he thinks he can get Rebecca, he's an even bigger fool than even Cornelius gave him credit for. We need to get Miriam out of that mirror too! Another great chapter, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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Althea is in a lot of trouble, and really needs to speak to Rebecca or Garth. If Eleanor could find her that would be a big help and a better way to find Travis. I know, she can't annoy the mob, she might not see her son again.
Then, that idiot Grayson, if he thinks he can get Rebecca, he's an even bigger fool than even Cornelius gave him credit for. We need to get Miriam out of that mirror too! Another great chapter, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
So she's been conscripted by the baddies to work with them if she ever wasnts to see her son again? That's another complication for them all to resolve, and there's already so much going on - but my hunch is that all the strands are interwoven and will come together in a huge climactic denouement. And Greyson is a sleaze. Can he be worse than Cornelius? Well done. (I just hope I don't forget any bits.)
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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So she's been conscripted by the baddies to work with them if she ever wasnts to see her son again? That's another complication for them all to resolve, and there's already so much going on - but my hunch is that all the strands are interwoven and will come together in a huge climactic denouement. And Greyson is a sleaze. Can he be worse than Cornelius? Well done. (I just hope I don't forget any bits.)
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I'm wondering if the story needs a short summary at the beginning to keep things straight... Not a thorough one but skimming the chapters. Oh, and I did a blooper...the young boys name is Travis not Trevor....Thanks so much, Wendy!
Smiles, Carol
Do these ages work in your thoughts....
If I base it on my family lineage and prohibition...
Cornelius (born early 1900s) Antonio and Miriam too!
Mason Webb and Angela (born in 40s)
Garth, Donatelli, Jenna - age in his early 40s
Grayson, Rebecca, Allie, in their late 30 or early 40
Althea a little younger and her son Travis - 8 or 9
Comment from karenina
Wow. I have a pretty good attention span and even I startled at the introduction of another character and more gang involvement and a mom I'm not feeling much more than disdain for.
Isn't Trevor dead? I'm trying to figure out how old this Anthea is....
I'm going to need a complete program roster pretty soon!
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Wow. I have a pretty good attention span and even I startled at the introduction of another character and more gang involvement and a mom I'm not feeling much more than disdain for.
Isn't Trevor dead? I'm trying to figure out how old this Anthea is....
I'm going to need a complete program roster pretty soon!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I answered an entire page of reviews but yours came back...guess you didn't like it or maybe it was the gremlins. LOL Trevor is dead.... I did a blooper and the boy's name is Travis.......And I think I have the ages of everyone worked out this way...tell me what you think....Do these ages work in your thoughts....
If I base it on my family lineage and prohibition...
Cornelius (born early 1900s) Antonio and Miriam too!
Mason Webb and Angela (born in 40s)
Garth, Donatelli, Jenna - age in his early 40s
Grayson, Rebecca, Allie, in their late 30 or early 40
Althea a little younger and her son Travis - 8 or 9
Going to try this again.....
Smiles, Carol
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Don't be silly. I would never "not" like a reply nor is there a way I could send it back! I hope you were kidding! This "not going through" thing has happened to a lot of us on site and I don't know why. Thanks for the clarification on the Trevor/Travis thing...and the age ranges help a lot!
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Did you mis that LOL... My brain is fried...I have been making some stupid mistakes...like not posting the right story... got some stuff on my mind and I write to keep it at bay but then I goof things up. Did those age ranges seem right to you????? Hope all is well.
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All is as well as it needs to be, thanks. The ages make sense to me now. I went back and reread and I was better able to understand who fit where...
Comment from pome lover
well, this is the first chapter I've read, then when I finished, I went to make some comments on it and saw your list of characters and about died. How can anybody keep up with a list of that many people?
At any rate, I hope she rescues her son without either one of them getting hurt.
So you are number one ranked author of the whole FS group? And number 3 in the novelist ranking? and, my goodness, number 9 reviewer? You must live on this site. Congratulations! That is quite something!
Katharine
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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well, this is the first chapter I've read, then when I finished, I went to make some comments on it and saw your list of characters and about died. How can anybody keep up with a list of that many people?
At any rate, I hope she rescues her son without either one of them getting hurt.
So you are number one ranked author of the whole FS group? And number 3 in the novelist ranking? and, my goodness, number 9 reviewer? You must live on this site. Congratulations! That is quite something!
Katharine
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Don't let the character list scare you... I've list the gangsters and others who merely have cameos in the story too. And lately, yes, my computer is owning me... I say I'm not going to stay on it all day...but I do for the most part....writing.... I live in the country and it's too cold to go outside. I can choose cleaning or writing...Hmmm... writing wins hands down.
Thanks for reading and I hope you will continue to follow.
Smiles, Carol
