On a Bench by the Sea
Dialogue-only contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from Nicolettetamara
Wow, this story is absolutely beautiful in every way. It brought me to tears! I was so not expecting that ending and it made it all the more touching! As a mom and a daughter this pulled on all my heart strings. Thank you for sharing!
Sending love and light,
Nicolette
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Wow, this story is absolutely beautiful in every way. It brought me to tears! I was so not expecting that ending and it made it all the more touching! As a mom and a daughter this pulled on all my heart strings. Thank you for sharing!
Sending love and light,
Nicolette
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I wish I had a six for this beautiful conversation, Jessica. The tears I'm looking through tell me its deserving of being the contest winner. Congratulations, beautifully written.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I wish I had a six for this beautiful conversation, Jessica. The tears I'm looking through tell me its deserving of being the contest winner. Congratulations, beautifully written.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Valda, thank you so much!
Comment from Mufasa
I admit I began reading this with my usual skepticism. Dialogue-only pieces tend to bottom out after a paragraph or so. This one was a welcome surprise. I watched my mom fall into the dark well of Alzheimer's. It's a most cruel disease, both for the victim, and the loved ones that stand alongside. Well done, Jessica.
MD
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I admit I began reading this with my usual skepticism. Dialogue-only pieces tend to bottom out after a paragraph or so. This one was a welcome surprise. I watched my mom fall into the dark well of Alzheimer's. It's a most cruel disease, both for the victim, and the loved ones that stand alongside. Well done, Jessica.
MD
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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That truly means the world to me. Thank you so much.
Xo
Jess
Comment from samandlancelot
Hi Jessica,
You've written an excellent "dialogue only" story with a heartwarming message to do your best in life, and the rewards will pay off in the end. You created a strong atmosphere and connection with the white deck and the bench by the sea. Congratulations on your win.
Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Hi Jessica,
You've written an excellent "dialogue only" story with a heartwarming message to do your best in life, and the rewards will pay off in the end. You created a strong atmosphere and connection with the white deck and the bench by the sea. Congratulations on your win.
Patricia
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Patricia, thank you so much for your kind words.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from wilkswrites
I kind of thought I was losing it for a moment there as your story took that unexpected turn. Very well written. I could almost see the old man and the young lady sitting on that bench watching the water. Growing old is so hard for some (probably most). Good job!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I kind of thought I was losing it for a moment there as your story took that unexpected turn. Very well written. I could almost see the old man and the young lady sitting on that bench watching the water. Growing old is so hard for some (probably most). Good job!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much! This truly means a lot to me.
Xo
Jess
Comment from Barry Penfold
This is a top effort. Great concept with a surprise at the end. The dialogue is entertaining, and it retains the reader's interest. Difficult to do especially in a rather long piece. Well done. Congratulations on the win.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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This is a top effort. Great concept with a surprise at the end. The dialogue is entertaining, and it retains the reader's interest. Difficult to do especially in a rather long piece. Well done. Congratulations on the win.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Barry, I'm honored. Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from DonKip
I'm typing through tears to tell you moving this is. Reading this as a father to 2 children (now fully grown) makes me wonder if it will be me someday on that bench, and hopefully my children have the same tenderness to care for me like this. Thanks for stirring me today!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I'm typing through tears to tell you moving this is. Reading this as a father to 2 children (now fully grown) makes me wonder if it will be me someday on that bench, and hopefully my children have the same tenderness to care for me like this. Thanks for stirring me today!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Don, thank you so much for this beautiful review. It means the world. Xo
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Jess!
I don't know how I missed your exceptionally well-crafted dialogue narrative, but... Congratulations on penning a beautiful story of loss and love.
Realistic dialogue that resonates with me deeply as my mother also suffered from dementia.
I love the setting and the little hints that you interspersed throughout your story...
Again, Congratulations!
Best wishes,
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Good morning, Jess!
I don't know how I missed your exceptionally well-crafted dialogue narrative, but... Congratulations on penning a beautiful story of loss and love.
Realistic dialogue that resonates with me deeply as my mother also suffered from dementia.
I love the setting and the little hints that you interspersed throughout your story...
Again, Congratulations!
Best wishes,
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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diane, thank you so much for your kind words and wonderful review. I'm delighted (but not surprised) that you picked up on the little hints many didn't catch.
I'm so sorry to hear you experienced this with your mom. Xo
Comment from Aiona
I knew I saved some sixes for a good reason! What a lovely story in dialogue only. Even without the color-coding, I could probably easily tell who was speaking. I love the surprise turn the story takes.
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I knew I saved some sixes for a good reason! What a lovely story in dialogue only. Even without the color-coding, I could probably easily tell who was speaking. I love the surprise turn the story takes.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from Contests
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
