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Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "On Your Mark, Get Set..."Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Esther Brown
Yes, redheads are amazing in green. You have style in your writing. From the socially inept Jane to the motherly feelings treating Rebekah. Amish artists I think of as cooks and carpenters, not opera singers, but why not? Love it. Esther
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Yes, redheads are amazing in green. You have style in your writing. From the socially inept Jane to the motherly feelings treating Rebekah. Amish artists I think of as cooks and carpenters, not opera singers, but why not? Love it. Esther
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Absolutely! Why not?! Her mom was, after all!
Thank you for this very nice review! Xo
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Always welcome.
Comment from Debbie Pope
This chapter is so you. I've said that before, but this one is probably more so. Without your notes, I knew that the music was perfect for the new student. It's just something that you know. Then there is the dress shopping. Of course you need green sequins.
The "obnoxious barnacle" even grates on my nerves. She is the perfect addition to the saga.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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This chapter is so you. I've said that before, but this one is probably more so. Without your notes, I knew that the music was perfect for the new student. It's just something that you know. Then there is the dress shopping. Of course you need green sequins.
The "obnoxious barnacle" even grates on my nerves. She is the perfect addition to the saga.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Hahaha. Thank you, Debbie. She has definitely been the character all the reviewers love to hate! Gretchen and I have been loving all the feedback that way.
Thank you for all this encouragement and for the additional stars, as well. Totally appreciated. xoxox
Comment from Bill Schott
Ran out of sixes, so this five and a thumbs up will have to convey how entertaining this chapter and all of the preceding ones have been. I enjoy the interaction of the lovely Rebekka and the living curse Jane.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Ran out of sixes, so this five and a thumbs up will have to convey how entertaining this chapter and all of the preceding ones have been. I enjoy the interaction of the lovely Rebekka and the living curse Jane.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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I am appreciative of both! Thank you for this warm and appreciative review. Xo
Comment from Lori Mulligan
Hi there!
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. You really know how to write an annoying character like Jane. She seems so real and such a contrast to Rebekah.
As always, I love the descriptions and sensory details, especially describing the emerald dress! I'm a red head too!
I can't wait to see where this story goes next!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Hi there!
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. You really know how to write an annoying character like Jane. She seems so real and such a contrast to Rebekah.
As always, I love the descriptions and sensory details, especially describing the emerald dress! I'm a red head too!
I can't wait to see where this story goes next!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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A fellow ginger? I had no idea! No wonder we along so easily! Thank you for such a terrific review.
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You're welcome! Look forward to next one!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I'm so excited for Rebekah.... i can visualize how beautiful she looks. It would be fun to shop for her and watch her beautiful face's expression.... like a child in a candy shop.
Well done. I hope you can get rid of Jane. Is she a real person in your life? I hope not. LoL
Well done, I love it.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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I'm so excited for Rebekah.... i can visualize how beautiful she looks. It would be fun to shop for her and watch her beautiful face's expression.... like a child in a candy shop.
Well done. I hope you can get rid of Jane. Is she a real person in your life? I hope not. LoL
Well done, I love it.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you for this delightful review, Gypsy. I love having you along on this road trip. Thank you for always being generous with your words to me. Xo
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a delightful chapter in every way, Rachelle. I loved how you interspersed the wonderful experience you all were having with the annoyingly funny interruptions from Jane. You have made her so stereotypically annoying that she provides great comic relief.
And your and Gretchen's inner thoughts and reactions to her are priceless. The "I lost a bet sign," Gretchen's "suddenly sounding like a perky game-show host," and your apology to the clerk were great touches.
It was delightful hearing about Rebekah's reactions to the whole experience and your joy in enabling this for her. I would be surprised if she doesn't take to this new life, especially if her musical experience goes well.
Just a charming, heartwarming, and very humorous chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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This was a delightful chapter in every way, Rachelle. I loved how you interspersed the wonderful experience you all were having with the annoyingly funny interruptions from Jane. You have made her so stereotypically annoying that she provides great comic relief.
And your and Gretchen's inner thoughts and reactions to her are priceless. The "I lost a bet sign," Gretchen's "suddenly sounding like a perky game-show host," and your apology to the clerk were great touches.
It was delightful hearing about Rebekah's reactions to the whole experience and your joy in enabling this for her. I would be surprised if she doesn't take to this new life, especially if her musical experience goes well.
Just a charming, heartwarming, and very humorous chapter.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you times a million zillion for this beautiful review. I could not appreciate it more. Xoxo
Comment from Neonewman
I enjoyed this chapter soooooooo muccccchhhhhh! No, for real! It was insanely pleasureful. I'm with Gretchen, HELP HER KILL BABY JANE. LOL.
totally obnoxious barnacle? This had me rolling.
You are Hella funny, my friend.
This started my special day(My Mother calls it)off with a BANG!
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed this chapter soooooooo muccccchhhhhh! No, for real! It was insanely pleasureful. I'm with Gretchen, HELP HER KILL BABY JANE. LOL.
totally obnoxious barnacle? This had me rolling.
You are Hella funny, my friend.
This started my special day(My Mother calls it)off with a BANG!
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Happy Birthday!! Thank you for gifting ME with this lovely review and the extra stars. I appreciate very much. xoxox
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Thank you, and you're welcome.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Rachelle,
put simply, this posting was outstanding gal. I didn't understand all the clothing jargon, but I could feel the excitement that you describe as Rebekah is getting fitted out. It's too bad there wasn't a smut store nearby that you could drop off loudmouth into. It sounds like she'd be right at home there. One question, your picture shows you wearing black, why not green gal? This was delightful for sure. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Hello Rachelle,
put simply, this posting was outstanding gal. I didn't understand all the clothing jargon, but I could feel the excitement that you describe as Rebekah is getting fitted out. It's too bad there wasn't a smut store nearby that you could drop off loudmouth into. It sounds like she'd be right at home there. One question, your picture shows you wearing black, why not green gal? This was delightful for sure. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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That's one of my "professional pianist" photoshoot ones, so those are always black dresses. You'll have to just use your imagination, I'm afraid. But you're a writer; you've got a great imagination!!
Good suggestion for what to do with Jaaaaane!
Thanks for thecfabulous review. I love it. Xoxo
Comment from Ulla
Hi Rachelle, this is another fine chapter, but I must say that you've described the fellow traveller from hell in the good/evil Jane. I wouldn't like to be anywhere near her. What a great story, Ulla, xcx
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Hi Rachelle, this is another fine chapter, but I must say that you've described the fellow traveller from hell in the good/evil Jane. I wouldn't like to be anywhere near her. What a great story, Ulla, xcx
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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It's so funny, Ulla; every reviewer absolutely despises her! They're pretty much all asking when we're ditching her. But she'll be at the convention! So get ready for mayhem! And thank you for this fun review. Xo
Comment from pome lover
great chapter.
I know every story has to have a "villain" but you and Gretchen outdid yourselves with Jane. What a total jerk, and that's the nicest insult I could think of. I hope your cousin, Tova appreciates your efforts.
BUT, also, what fun, the shopping trip (for you both:)
I think, if you can get rid of Jane, this story ending will be a happy one all the way 'round, with a bit of your typical humor thrown in for good measure.
Katharine
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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great chapter.
I know every story has to have a "villain" but you and Gretchen outdid yourselves with Jane. What a total jerk, and that's the nicest insult I could think of. I hope your cousin, Tova appreciates your efforts.
BUT, also, what fun, the shopping trip (for you both:)
I think, if you can get rid of Jane, this story ending will be a happy one all the way 'round, with a bit of your typical humor thrown in for good measure.
Katharine
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Yes, Jane's everyone's favorite whipping boy. Thanks for this absolutely perfect review! I love it. Xoxo