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Spirited Justice

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Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Angelo has a lot of goodness in him, he just made a few wrong moves in the past. Maybe Naomi can love him if she survives, and maybe he can be the man she needs him to be, especially if he can help her save the information in the folder.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
    I think once he realizes what is in the papers, he will be in touch with Garth and Donatelli. It's a lot bigger than anyone thinks. Thanks for the review and for following the story.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi Carol,
It looks like Alejandro is given a very rare second chance, and some money and a car, to boot. Much better ending for him than Jose, proving Angelo and Carlos have a fair side to them.

Great chapter,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
    the next chapter will surprise you... It did me anyhow. It wasn't how I intended things to unfold but we all know how stories have a life of their own. Thaks as always, Rhonda.
    Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 19-Sep-2024
    You are so very right. They have a way of taking you for quite a spin sometimes!!! And yours are always good for their turn arounds!!
Comment from Harry Craft
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The buzzing of his phone interrupted his moment of solitude. I love this great line in the story! I was wondering too what was so important about those papers. You kept us hanging on just like a good writer should. So, keep up the great work and we will keep on reading. Have a great write Carol!

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
    I've got to quite writing shorts and get back to the story. I was afraid I was rushing some of the readers because my readership has dropped on the novel. But as long as someone enjoys it, I'll keep on writing.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by Harry Craft on 18-Sep-2024
    Oh, you can do both lol!
Comment from royowen
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So Alejandro has been foiled, and it looks like Carlos is learning that his son will never change, unless he's brought to a screaming halt, that's the trouble with thinking that one can walk on a knife's edge, they won't prosper, as Jose will find out, well done Carol, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Yes, things didn't go as Jose thought they would, but then he had no idea of consequences.... Daddy always fixed it for him if it wasn't right. This time... the stakes were high.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by royowen on 16-Sep-2024
    Well done
Comment from Jacob1395
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You do a brilliant job of weaving action in your chapters, Carol, which is what makes your writing so engaging. I loved the dialogue between Angelo and Carlos which created a real sense of menace. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
    Thanks Jacob for taking the time to follow my story and for enjoying my efforts. Not too many people will stick with a novel so it is much appreciated when someone does.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Carol. That was a close call, indeed, but I'm glad that Angelo looked out for Alejandro.vit was his lucky day. I hope we that will stay that way. What a story! Hugs, Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    thanks so much, Ulla. The next chapter gets rocky but after that I think it will be a little smoother sailing at list for a while. Maybe I might sprinkle in a little love potion but I haven't thought it through just yet.
    Thanks as always -
    Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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HMMM!!! I read this out of order. Now, listen you!!!! You can't post twice close together because I can't handle it. GRRR Well, I had figured most of this out by reading the other post first, but it was good to read this, too.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    Oops! sorry...I forgot that I posted one before I left for the day and then posted the other one later...I'll try not to do that again. Every other day or so works I think. Thank you for reading though.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by barbara.wilkey on 15-Sep-2024
    I hope you know I was teasing.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    I do! You just wish that Garth had been there! LOL
reply by barbara.wilkey on 15-Sep-2024
    Me too. Pant, pant, pant. LOL
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm glad Angelo helped Alejandro; I'm sure that Jose will be happy, though. Perhaps Angelo should dump his phone as well? We seem to be clearing up some mess now, but Angelo will be in a big hurry to get back to Naomi. He might deny it, but I think he loves her.

Now that Carlos has learnt his son will never change, he is ready to send him to the police. And the cherry on the top is Angelo is free from Carlos and won't be bothered again. Another lovely, well written chapter. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

I am not going to come on to FS much for a while; I'm having some medication reactions and need time off from doing anything. If you could send me an email when you post your chapters, I will come and read them. I Don't want to miss any. Love you lots. xxx

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    I'll pm you in a minute with my concerns...which are many. Thank you for the awesome review and stars...I just finished the next chapter but only read when you can. Take care!



    Hugs and lots of love, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
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That was a superb chapter. I am glad that Angelo does not have Alejandro's blood to answer for. Hopefully Carlos will keep his word, and also hopefully Naomi will recover! Very well written!
Wendy

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    thanks, Wendy...Your answer was just posted and I hope you approve.... for the most part. LOL Appreciate the review and your kindness.
    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
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Whew! That was a nail-biter. Seems like Alejandro just escaped from being killed and won the jackpot. Too bad he has to live as someone else now. I sure hope Carlos is sincere about giving the papers to the authorities and turning in his son!

I was confused by the description "Angelo tries to escape" -- Did you mean Alejandro?

Typo:
Leust say they will be preoccupied (Let's)

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
    Yes, it is too bad but things might change and he'll be able to go home again soemtime, but he's probably safer in Canada. LOL thanks for reading and enjoying...don't bite the nails too much though.
    Smiles, Carol