Reminiscing
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter 1 Eleanor"A collection of short stories
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Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Barbara! (Port Raid Review #1)
You have been selected by Eyepatch Patrick and his parrot Pookie for a PORT RAID, many consecutive reviews of your work. Once I have a quick drink in your best tavern, I will move into your port to the things that you would love to promote but cannot afford to. I do this because I believe it is a tragedy that so many excellent posts sit dusty and unread for ages. If you like the idea of the PORT RAID, feel free to construct your own ship, befriend a parrot, and venture out into the vast FanStory ocean and the hundreds of inviting ports that await you!
---I am a sentimental guy and a parent myself. I had many conversations with my children just like this one when they were little and sitting in car seats.
---You proved the rule that grandmas don't often help in situations like this. They conveniently forget the logic that Andrew was presenting about the reality of dog ownership. They think only of the happiness of the child. *laughs* But that is what grandmas are supposed to do! Their days of balancing pros and cons are over!
---One little thing I might suggest: "Unfortunately, or maybe fortunately my just turned four-year-old granddaughter, Eleanor, her birthday was July 29th, gave me" --This sentence is a bit out of control with descriptive independent clauses. If you agree, here is a suggestion: "Unfortunately, my four-year-old granddaughter Eleanor gave me something to write about, and I couldn't pass it up." I would argue that the other information in the sentence that I removed is unecessary. But of course, it is totally up to you!
--This is a very cute story about your granddaughter that rings true within my own experience as a parent.
Okay, we shall be back for the next chapter soon!
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hello Barbara! (Port Raid Review #1)
You have been selected by Eyepatch Patrick and his parrot Pookie for a PORT RAID, many consecutive reviews of your work. Once I have a quick drink in your best tavern, I will move into your port to the things that you would love to promote but cannot afford to. I do this because I believe it is a tragedy that so many excellent posts sit dusty and unread for ages. If you like the idea of the PORT RAID, feel free to construct your own ship, befriend a parrot, and venture out into the vast FanStory ocean and the hundreds of inviting ports that await you!
---I am a sentimental guy and a parent myself. I had many conversations with my children just like this one when they were little and sitting in car seats.
---You proved the rule that grandmas don't often help in situations like this. They conveniently forget the logic that Andrew was presenting about the reality of dog ownership. They think only of the happiness of the child. *laughs* But that is what grandmas are supposed to do! Their days of balancing pros and cons are over!
---One little thing I might suggest: "Unfortunately, or maybe fortunately my just turned four-year-old granddaughter, Eleanor, her birthday was July 29th, gave me" --This sentence is a bit out of control with descriptive independent clauses. If you agree, here is a suggestion: "Unfortunately, my four-year-old granddaughter Eleanor gave me something to write about, and I couldn't pass it up." I would argue that the other information in the sentence that I removed is unecessary. But of course, it is totally up to you!
--This is a very cute story about your granddaughter that rings true within my own experience as a parent.
Okay, we shall be back for the next chapter soon!
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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You're correct about the putting in the birthday, there's no reason for it. My logic was she is barely four, but who cares. Nobody. I appreciate the help.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh my gosh, this is the funniest story, ever. I can just see your son sitting at the redlight wishing it to turn. Been there, lol. And the whole poop story is priceless!!
And then you, shame on you for backing the baby about the dog. hehe. I would have, too!! Grandma's rights!!!
You did a great job of giving us character insight with your story.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Oh my gosh, this is the funniest story, ever. I can just see your son sitting at the redlight wishing it to turn. Been there, lol. And the whole poop story is priceless!!
And then you, shame on you for backing the baby about the dog. hehe. I would have, too!! Grandma's rights!!!
You did a great job of giving us character insight with your story.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I do still ask if they have a dog yet. I happen to know Andrew loves dogs. LOL thank you for going back and reading.
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Hehe!! I hope the answer is yes soon!!
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is so very cute. The dialogue is genuine:
When Harley visits here he doesn't poop in the backyard."
"Yes, he does. Grandma cleans it up."
Made me laugh. Great family memories. D
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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This is so very cute. The dialogue is genuine:
When Harley visits here he doesn't poop in the backyard."
"Yes, he does. Grandma cleans it up."
Made me laugh. Great family memories. D
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the support.
Comment from Shanbreen
Barbara, I love dogs and most other animals. My dog, Rocco, is an example.=). I love the interplay between Eleanor and Andrew. It's so typical of a father talking to his daughter. You captured that pretty well.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Barbara, I love dogs and most other animals. My dog, Rocco, is an example.=). I love the interplay between Eleanor and Andrew. It's so typical of a father talking to his daughter. You captured that pretty well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the support.
Comment from Neonewman
This is a lovely story about Eleanor and her yearning for a dog. I had dogs growing up; yes, they teach us unconditional love. I hope they find the time to get her one. Thank you, Barbara, for sharing this heartwarming story.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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This is a lovely story about Eleanor and her yearning for a dog. I had dogs growing up; yes, they teach us unconditional love. I hope they find the time to get her one. Thank you, Barbara, for sharing this heartwarming story.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I do believe every child needs a dog. LOL Thank you for the support.
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Me too, and my pleasure.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Barbara, I really like this chapter. It reminds me of me and my siblings begging our mom and dad for a dog. "We'll scoop up after it, mom and dad, we promise!"
So, in good faith, my parents relented. We kids were true to our word! The first day we gleefully scooped the dog's poop. I still have a picture in mind of my mom, come rain or shine, winter or summer, scooping our dog's poop day after day! And doggie puke would make us kids run in another room. I miss my mom and dad for many reasons. One reason is had 4 of my own dogs--one right now--and I scoop at least twice a day.
My mom would be proud.
This is such a sweet story, reminiscent of my childhood!
Sorry about the rant; I don't mean to take away the thunder for your cute story. My dog is asleep, and I have no one to talk to right now.
Have a nice weekend, Barbara.
Congrats again on your published work.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Barbara, I really like this chapter. It reminds me of me and my siblings begging our mom and dad for a dog. "We'll scoop up after it, mom and dad, we promise!"
So, in good faith, my parents relented. We kids were true to our word! The first day we gleefully scooped the dog's poop. I still have a picture in mind of my mom, come rain or shine, winter or summer, scooping our dog's poop day after day! And doggie puke would make us kids run in another room. I miss my mom and dad for many reasons. One reason is had 4 of my own dogs--one right now--and I scoop at least twice a day.
My mom would be proud.
This is such a sweet story, reminiscent of my childhood!
Sorry about the rant; I don't mean to take away the thunder for your cute story. My dog is asleep, and I have no one to talk to right now.
Have a nice weekend, Barbara.
Congrats again on your published work.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing your story with me. I loved it. I have had at least one dog my entire life. All my novels have dogs in them. I feel everybody needs a dog.
Comment from T B Botts
Oh my word Barbara,
this is too funny. I wish I knew some people who liked dog poop, I'd ask them to walk around the neighborhood and clean up after the folks who have dogs but don't feel the need to clean up after them. That poor child needs a dog, but I know all too well the problem with live pets. Perhaps she'd settle for tropical fish until she gets old enough to be responsible for a dog. God love her. Thanks so much for sharing this. It made me laugh out loud.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Oh my word Barbara,
this is too funny. I wish I knew some people who liked dog poop, I'd ask them to walk around the neighborhood and clean up after the folks who have dogs but don't feel the need to clean up after them. That poor child needs a dog, but I know all too well the problem with live pets. Perhaps she'd settle for tropical fish until she gets old enough to be responsible for a dog. God love her. Thanks so much for sharing this. It made me laugh out loud.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I believe everybody needs at least one dog. Thank you for your support.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hey, my friend -- you couldn't pass up the opportunity to write about it, and I couldn't pass up the chance to read it. :)
One minor correction -- these are independant clauses, so you need either double hyphens or semi colons -- like this:
Unfortunately, or maybe fortunately my just turned four-year-old granddaughter, Eleanor(;) her birthday was July 29th(;) gave me something to write about, and I couldn't pass it up.
"Dogs don't poop a lot." HAHAHAHAHA!
"No, but maybe our neighbors like dog poop." AAAAaHAHAHA! This child is precious!
Please be sure to tell Andrew your readers say Ellie needs a dog too. :))
What a charming story, Barbara!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Hey, my friend -- you couldn't pass up the opportunity to write about it, and I couldn't pass up the chance to read it. :)
One minor correction -- these are independant clauses, so you need either double hyphens or semi colons -- like this:
Unfortunately, or maybe fortunately my just turned four-year-old granddaughter, Eleanor(;) her birthday was July 29th(;) gave me something to write about, and I couldn't pass it up.
"Dogs don't poop a lot." HAHAHAHAHA!
"No, but maybe our neighbors like dog poop." AAAAaHAHAHA! This child is precious!
Please be sure to tell Andrew your readers say Ellie needs a dog too. :))
What a charming story, Barbara!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I will get on those corrections. I appreciate the help. I am a firm believer everybody needs a dog.
Comment from Jim Wile
Very sweet and funny, Barbara. Something tells me they'll be getting a dog. I loved your granddaughter's questions and suggestions, and your son was very patient with her and explained things well. And you certainly didn't help, but, hey, kids should have a dog. We had them when we were kids.
But I understand when both parents work, and everyone's out of the house much of the day, having a dog can be unfair to the dog. Still, people manage somehow.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Very sweet and funny, Barbara. Something tells me they'll be getting a dog. I loved your granddaughter's questions and suggestions, and your son was very patient with her and explained things well. And you certainly didn't help, but, hey, kids should have a dog. We had them when we were kids.
But I understand when both parents work, and everyone's out of the house much of the day, having a dog can be unfair to the dog. Still, people manage somehow.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I'm a firm believer every child needs at least one dog. LOL Thank you for the support.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The reader is getting the idea that Eleanor is dropping some heavy hints about wanting a dog. We'll have to see how that goes. We can tell Eleanor has a new plan: "Again, Eleanor got quiet for a few minutes, before she started again," just has a funny ending and maybe a happy ending for Eleanor,
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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The reader is getting the idea that Eleanor is dropping some heavy hints about wanting a dog. We'll have to see how that goes. We can tell Eleanor has a new plan: "Again, Eleanor got quiet for a few minutes, before she started again," just has a funny ending and maybe a happy ending for Eleanor,
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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So far no dog in St. Louis. I'll let you know if Eleanor wins. LOL Thank you for the kind support.
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Go Eleanor go lol
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Eleanor is a hot mess and keeps her parents on their toes.
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I bet she does and knows how to do it well I bet she's skilled she has studied them and she knows them well.
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You're right.
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Gallows sigh