Comment from karenina

Excellent

I liked this, but sadly I had no clue what this song was and so off to YouTube I went to find it.

You can pretty easily embed the song into your author's comments.

Check out Jannypan's tutorial (listed in a thread just beneath the contest rules)--

It IS a contagiously "hip" song!

(Where was I that I didn't know this in 1973 ~ Lord knows I was of age!)

Good luck in the contest!

Karenina

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022

thanks I will imbedded that in the posting today

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022

thanks i learned a new thing today it worked

reply by karenina on 15-Dec-2022

Cool! I just saw it! That really brings your lyrics alive!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author.
I enjoyed your words of the re-write. You expressed your
thoughts and feelings well. Your words read smoothly and
created great imagery while giving readers much to think
about. Thanks for the notes and video, Jan

I would delete the letters etc. at the very end and fix
these lines
What's the truth today might become another lie
Another fake thing �?�¢?" a real deep fake, y'al.

[those capital As and the y'al needs to be y'all]

Best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022

Thanks

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022

thanks so much it worked fine learned a new trick today

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

I'm afraid I never heard of the Tower of Power band. I never listened to funk or soul music, which is probably why I didn't know them. You did a great rewrite. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022

there is always time to try something new. Bump City is their best album.