The virus grows
It takes its toll7 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry flowed smoothly with great imagery,
Mystery Author. I could hear the original in my head as
I read your re-write. Great job. Your words were well chosen,
meaningful, and fit the beat perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Your contest entry flowed smoothly with great imagery,
Mystery Author. I could hear the original in my head as
I read your re-write. Great job. Your words were well chosen,
meaningful, and fit the beat perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you Jan
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A current and insightful poem. And yes it does continue.
The rhymes are unforced. The words have a drum-like roll. The poem stays on point and the images are blunt and clear.
Thanks for a good read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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A current and insightful poem. And yes it does continue.
The rhymes are unforced. The words have a drum-like roll. The poem stays on point and the images are blunt and clear.
Thanks for a good read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from karenina
I think this song by Garth Brooks is incredible. I'd encourage you to post his version of it in your comment section, Jan has left instructions on how to do that...
Garth:
"Three thirty in the morning
Not a soul in sight
The city's lookin' like a ghost town
On a moonless summer night"
You:
"Early in the morning
not a soul in sight
cities looking like a ghost town
on a cold and winters night."
Garth:
"Every light is burnin'
In a house across town
She's pacin' by the telephone
In her faded flannel gown"
You:
Every light is burning in houses across town.
People are pacing by the TV the news is coming on.
Asking God for a miracle and hoping we're not right.
Praying it's not Corona making us lose the fight.
This makes it very easy to sync your lyrics to his melody and brings this up to a commonality we've all (sadly) had to endure.
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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I think this song by Garth Brooks is incredible. I'd encourage you to post his version of it in your comment section, Jan has left instructions on how to do that...
Garth:
"Three thirty in the morning
Not a soul in sight
The city's lookin' like a ghost town
On a moonless summer night"
You:
"Early in the morning
not a soul in sight
cities looking like a ghost town
on a cold and winters night."
Garth:
"Every light is burnin'
In a house across town
She's pacin' by the telephone
In her faded flannel gown"
You:
Every light is burning in houses across town.
People are pacing by the TV the news is coming on.
Asking God for a miracle and hoping we're not right.
Praying it's not Corona making us lose the fight.
This makes it very easy to sync your lyrics to his melody and brings this up to a commonality we've all (sadly) had to endure.
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Ok thank you I wasn?t sure how to do it.
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These are Jan's instructions...
Good luck!
"Type in browser song & artist (if you know artist)
ex--White Christmas by Bing Crosby
Right click
Look over list--pick the 1 you want--right click
Where the picture shows, start video playing
Scroll down a bit and Right click where is says
'Copy embed code' {don't worry about all those numbers etc.
Go to your edit page of the work you want video in Advanced Editor--scroll to Author Notes
Right click where you want it to show [don't worry about those numbers etc.]
Then SAVE
THEN go back and look at it. You should see the video
[After a couple times practicing, you'll be a pro--practice on a disabled work]]"
Comment from papa55mike
It's not Covid that's spreading in the south but the combo of Type A flu and Strep throat. Our family is still recovering. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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It's not Covid that's spreading in the south but the combo of Type A flu and Strep throat. Our family is still recovering. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much Mike 🙂
Comment from Faith Williams
I could definitely put your words to the tune of that song. I am most struck by the last line of your chorus, 'Deep in their hearts the virus grows.' A powerful metaphor that a virus can be some other kind of infection.
One thing: '... and thankful their allright' should be 'they're'
Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I could definitely put your words to the tune of that song. I am most struck by the last line of your chorus, 'Deep in their hearts the virus grows.' A powerful metaphor that a virus can be some other kind of infection.
One thing: '... and thankful their allright' should be 'they're'
Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with the fear in this post as I have had Covid once and it was awful and since then I have been careful who I spend time with. Covid is something we have to learn to live with, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I can identify with the fear in this post as I have had Covid once and it was awful and since then I have been careful who I spend time with. Covid is something we have to learn to live with, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Thank you Dolly
Comment from Ricky1024
This Re-write a Song Contest Entry was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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This Re-write a Song Contest Entry was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much