Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Metamorphose"Musings of an old man - 2022
42 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
You have painted a wonderful scene of the splitting of the crysillist. Her home for so long, now with damp wings she is free to fly away and create more of her kind. Well done. K xx
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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You have painted a wonderful scene of the splitting of the crysillist. Her home for so long, now with damp wings she is free to fly away and create more of her kind. Well done. K xx
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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K. thank you so much!
Comment from Gloria ....
Metamorphosis really does have a magical quality to the process. The caterpillar walks on the ground, until it transforms into a magnificent butterfly.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Metamorphosis really does have a magical quality to the process. The caterpillar walks on the ground, until it transforms into a magnificent butterfly.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Gloria, thank you.I seldom attempt a Haiku poem, because the ancient art of Japanese Haiku is such a sacred art and I am not trained in any manner to claim expertise of the art.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
I love this Haiku. It paints the metamorphosis of an insect, but also gives glimpses of our own changes and milestones. Very nicely done!
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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I love this Haiku. It paints the metamorphosis of an insect, but also gives glimpses of our own changes and milestones. Very nicely done!
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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San Duck thank you!
Comment from Brian Grimes
This is a very nice and simple haiku explaining the complex subject of change. Sometimes, as with the change from caterpillar to butterfly, it is both necessary and beautiful.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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This is a very nice and simple haiku explaining the complex subject of change. Sometimes, as with the change from caterpillar to butterfly, it is both necessary and beautiful.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Brian, thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written 5-7-5 poem about the metamorphis of the butterfly. You used very good words and very nice imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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This is a very nice and well written 5-7-5 poem about the metamorphis of the butterfly. You used very good words and very nice imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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Teri, thank you for the good wishes.
Comment from DeboraDyess
You met the challenge of Haiku perfectly. I love the imagery of death leading to life. Your 'painting' is well done and effective.
Blessings and best in the contest,
Deb
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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You met the challenge of Haiku perfectly. I love the imagery of death leading to life. Your 'painting' is well done and effective.
Blessings and best in the contest,
Deb
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Deb, thank you so much!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You have successfully satisfied the intent of a true Haiku. I can see the metamorphosis taking place simply by reading your words. I didn't even need the picture to see the butterfly emerge.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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You have successfully satisfied the intent of a true Haiku. I can see the metamorphosis taking place simply by reading your words. I didn't even need the picture to see the butterfly emerge.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks Gary!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great Haiku. The visual came through with your words as well as with your artwork. A beautiful naturistic poem of the progression of the butterfly Larva. Loved it!
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This is a great Haiku. The visual came through with your words as well as with your artwork. A beautiful naturistic poem of the progression of the butterfly Larva. Loved it!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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John, thanks much!
Comment from tfawcus
Your use of the word my in the last line gives that element of surprise that is so much part of a haiku. What a close relationship there is between the nature around us and the nature within us.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Your use of the word my in the last line gives that element of surprise that is so much part of a haiku. What a close relationship there is between the nature around us and the nature within us.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Tony, yes, as I was writing this, I couldn't help but ponder the thought about our human transformations from birth to death.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello JLR,
Nice piece of poetry as 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
GOOD LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hello JLR,
Nice piece of poetry as 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
GOOD LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP