Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Sending a Prayer"Musings of an old man - 2022
26 total reviews
Comment from 1Dreamer
Beautiful work! I love the muted picture you chose accompanying your beautiful words. I especially love your last stanza and the reminders to take shorter strides and to pray for those who are less fortunate in this life. We miss so much when we are in a hurry.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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Beautiful work! I love the muted picture you chose accompanying your beautiful words. I especially love your last stanza and the reminders to take shorter strides and to pray for those who are less fortunate in this life. We miss so much when we are in a hurry.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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1Dreamer, it is with much appreciation, I reply to your review and comment, Best to you always!
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautifully written Villanelle poem. You took the reader along the shoreline with you watching the seagulls fly on that gentle breeze. Beautiful imagery and thoughtful prayer.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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A beautifully written Villanelle poem. You took the reader along the shoreline with you watching the seagulls fly on that gentle breeze. Beautiful imagery and thoughtful prayer.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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Janet, I am most humbled by your supportive comments. Thank you!
Comment from Paul McFarland
The Villanelle is one of the most difficult forms - at least in my estimation. You have done a really good job with this one. You have tied the picture in with the poem very nicely.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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The Villanelle is one of the most difficult forms - at least in my estimation. You have done a really good job with this one. You have tied the picture in with the poem very nicely.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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I am very honored by your tremendous validation on this poem. Thank you!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written villanelle poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme. Very Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Beautuful presentation.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a nicely written villanelle poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme. Very Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Beautuful presentation.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Joanne!
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Your welcome
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written Villanelle poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a very beautiful and very well written Villanelle poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Teri, I am so grateful for your wonderful comments. Thank you 🙏
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a beautifully written poem. I felt like I was at the shore feeling the gentle breeze and watching the seagulls. Thank you for the beautiful imagery. You did a good job writing this poem.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem. I felt like I was at the shore feeling the gentle breeze and watching the seagulls. Thank you for the beautiful imagery. You did a good job writing this poem.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Barbara, I thank you abundantly 🙏
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation, Jim.
-A good topic and repeating lines.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You do a good job with the nature imagery
as you watch the gulls, feel the breeze, and a clam that hides.
-The ending is very good as you see the man,
and offer a prayer "for this soul's sadness to be unbound."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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-Good artwork and presentation, Jim.
-A good topic and repeating lines.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You do a good job with the nature imagery
as you watch the gulls, feel the breeze, and a clam that hides.
-The ending is very good as you see the man,
and offer a prayer "for this soul's sadness to be unbound."
-Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much Pam, while not holding with conventional meter, I found the words building with such freedom from within and ran with them. :)
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You are very welcome, Jim. Sometimes the feeling and emotion is the most important thing.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Don't you have to wonder who and why such forms of poetry survive. I mean, why out of nowhere did the person arrive and syllablizing with the idea why not try aba aba aba aba aba abaa? Was his name Villanelle? was there a warrant for them? Okay, as to your effort. Bravo Zulu.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Don't you have to wonder who and why such forms of poetry survive. I mean, why out of nowhere did the person arrive and syllablizing with the idea why not try aba aba aba aba aba abaa? Was his name Villanelle? was there a warrant for them? Okay, as to your effort. Bravo Zulu.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you friend, Roger Wilco.
Comment from Wendy G
A very reflective poem in the Villanelle format - which lends itself to this deep thinking with the effective repetition. Your poem has gently imagery, reinforced by your choice of image, and the reulst is that one can visualise the scene clearly.
Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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A very reflective poem in the Villanelle format - which lends itself to this deep thinking with the effective repetition. Your poem has gently imagery, reinforced by your choice of image, and the reulst is that one can visualise the scene clearly.
Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Wendy, Thank you very much, while not holding with conventional meter, I found the words building with such freedom from within and ran with them. :)
Comment from Eternal Muse
I love the ocean. Love walking along the beach thinking, praying, creating poetry, inhaling that magic air.
Your poem talking to a reader, great imagery and visuals.
This appeased the nautical lover in me:
Effortlessly the gull over waves rides
at the seashore where nature abounds.
Teasing me to take shorter strides.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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I love the ocean. Love walking along the beach thinking, praying, creating poetry, inhaling that magic air.
Your poem talking to a reader, great imagery and visuals.
This appeased the nautical lover in me:
Effortlessly the gull over waves rides
at the seashore where nature abounds.
Teasing me to take shorter strides.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. I am grateful.