Contest Entry and Winners
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Trinity's Story"Short Stories
30 total reviews
Comment from Melissa Place
Wow, stunning story. I thought we were talking about a wedding, but unfortunately, it was a funeral. Wow, wow,wow! I love your writing. Are you published? Best wishes, Melissa
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Wow, stunning story. I thought we were talking about a wedding, but unfortunately, it was a funeral. Wow, wow,wow! I love your writing. Are you published? Best wishes, Melissa
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your outstanding review and the stars. It made me smile and that's a difficult thing to do lately. Appreciate the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written supernatural story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I wish you well in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This is a very well written supernatural story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I wish you well in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 15-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Valerie Fish
Wow, that was beautiful, I didn't see that one coming. ( Although 'supernatural' was a big clue!) You really built up the story, I was wandering how it was all going to end. Great description throughout, especially of the dress. ( love the pic). ' You Raise Me Up' means a lot to me, and our choir sang it for a charity concert once.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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Wow, that was beautiful, I didn't see that one coming. ( Although 'supernatural' was a big clue!) You really built up the story, I was wandering how it was all going to end. Great description throughout, especially of the dress. ( love the pic). ' You Raise Me Up' means a lot to me, and our choir sang it for a charity concert once.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much Valerie for your kindness and awesome stars for my supernatural story. I appreciate your time and thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from dmt1967
'Trinity gasped as she watched Paul, dressed in a black tuxedo, step from a car, double-parked( beside the other cars).' (delete) There is no need to elaborate as most people would assume and know there will be other cars.
Great story with a nice twist at the end that made me shed a tear lol. Take care, my friend, and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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'Trinity gasped as she watched Paul, dressed in a black tuxedo, step from a car, double-parked( beside the other cars).' (delete) There is no need to elaborate as most people would assume and know there will be other cars.
Great story with a nice twist at the end that made me shed a tear lol. Take care, my friend, and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
I think this deserves seven stars!! However, since I have only six, that's how many I'm giving you. The story although sad, was very touching. It was surprising to realize it was her funeral instead of their wedding that they had planned together. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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I think this deserves seven stars!! However, since I have only six, that's how many I'm giving you. The story although sad, was very touching. It was surprising to realize it was her funeral instead of their wedding that they had planned together. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a beautiful love story. However, I became confused along the way.
"Her fairytale wedding with the love of her life..." and "The beautiful bride allowed herself one momentary glance..." I know the funeral was the surprise ending, but the two sentences I mentioned clearly (at least to me) said wedding. When I read them, what did I miss?
I especially liked the descriptions of the flowers and the gown.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This is a beautiful love story. However, I became confused along the way.
"Her fairytale wedding with the love of her life..." and "The beautiful bride allowed herself one momentary glance..." I know the funeral was the surprise ending, but the two sentences I mentioned clearly (at least to me) said wedding. When I read them, what did I miss?
I especially liked the descriptions of the flowers and the gown.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Mary Shifman
This story is very well written. I wasn't sure how it would end, but I figured that something had happened at the wedding. I didn't realize that it was Trinity's funeral. It is a good story, but I still want to know what happened to the poor girl. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This story is very well written. I wasn't sure how it would end, but I figured that something had happened at the wedding. I didn't realize that it was Trinity's funeral. It is a good story, but I still want to know what happened to the poor girl. Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from pookietoo
I wish you good luck in the supernatural story contest entry. I hope all is well with you. Enjoy the blessings of life. Best wishes and keep smiling always.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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I wish you good luck in the supernatural story contest entry. I hope all is well with you. Enjoy the blessings of life. Best wishes and keep smiling always.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. It seems that what was meant to be that fairytale wedding was in reality the memorial service for Trinity. It also seems that her parents had gone before. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestion:
white gladiolus, (gladioli) for the plural, or even gladioluses
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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That's so sad. It seems that what was meant to be that fairytale wedding was in reality the memorial service for Trinity. It also seems that her parents had gone before. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestion:
white gladiolus, (gladioli) for the plural, or even gladioluses
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from writer723
I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol