Looking for Orion - 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Home - part 4"Brothers fight for faith ... and for their lives.
10 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, this story is so very good and seems to continue the same tension in every post. Well written!
Noticed one typo:
"Like Mount Everest, isn't it." Jack leaned againt (against) the stair rail behind his brother, trying to imagine it from Cody's perspective.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Oh, this story is so very good and seems to continue the same tension in every post. Well written!
Noticed one typo:
"Like Mount Everest, isn't it." Jack leaned againt (against) the stair rail behind his brother, trying to imagine it from Cody's perspective.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca. And, most especially, for that missing 's'! No one else has seen that, so I appreciate your sharp eyes!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good descriptive passage as Cody climbs the stairs determined but exhausted and also waiting for the Lehmann bros. Good chapter Deb with plenty of emotions on show from a caring family. Enjoyed it, cheers valda
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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A good descriptive passage as Cody climbs the stairs determined but exhausted and also waiting for the Lehmann bros. Good chapter Deb with plenty of emotions on show from a caring family. Enjoyed it, cheers valda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Valda. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debora, this is a great new chapter and so well written. Cody is obviously in pain but he knows he has to suppress it if he's going to survive. The Lehman brothers are evil. Can't wait to be reading on. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Hi Debora, this is a great new chapter and so well written. Cody is obviously in pain but he knows he has to suppress it if he's going to survive. The Lehman brothers are evil. Can't wait to be reading on. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thanks, Ulla! Hoping to pop over and catch another chapter of the Fisherman's Son tonight (if the grandsons cooperate! lol)
blessings!
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That would be lovely. :)))
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, once a cop always a cop, good boy:) no pain killers so he can give some pain to his killers. This chapter is about the power of endurance and the duty of taking care of your family above anything else.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Wow, once a cop always a cop, good boy:) no pain killers so he can give some pain to his killers. This chapter is about the power of endurance and the duty of taking care of your family above anything else.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Iza. I appreciate those encouraging comments.
Blessings!
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I just love this book give me more chapters pretty pls.
Comment from AJ McCall
Oh, man! That last line caught me so hard my heart skipped a beat! lol. I love how Cody's mom asked if he needed help changing. She's only a worried mother, and she just wants her sons and family to be safe. But I wonder, will the Lehman brothers strike tonight????? That would make the story so juicy. I want to know Deb!! Can't wait to read part five! Or the next chapter, lol!
(Wish I had six!)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Oh, man! That last line caught me so hard my heart skipped a beat! lol. I love how Cody's mom asked if he needed help changing. She's only a worried mother, and she just wants her sons and family to be safe. But I wonder, will the Lehman brothers strike tonight????? That would make the story so juicy. I want to know Deb!! Can't wait to read part five! Or the next chapter, lol!
(Wish I had six!)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Your enthusiasm is enough, AJ. No need to worry over stars. :)
Thank you! I"ll try to post it tonight, if the grandsons allow it. lol
Blessings!
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You're welcome! Haha! Hope so!
Comment from roof35
This is a bit of a cliff hanger, "He would strike tonight." I am looking forward to more. This very well written. I didn't spot any errors. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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This is a bit of a cliff hanger, "He would strike tonight." I am looking forward to more. This very well written. I didn't spot any errors. Nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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What a blessing you are! Thank you for the encouraging words and that extra star. :)
Blessings!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I hope they don't strike tonight! He's on his own with no Jack to help him. I hope he has a weapon of some sorts handy. But, I think the Lehman brothers have been off the scene long enough to want to finish the job once and for all. So, don't be long with the next part, Debs, I think it will be an exciting one. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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I hope they don't strike tonight! He's on his own with no Jack to help him. I hope he has a weapon of some sorts handy. But, I think the Lehman brothers have been off the scene long enough to want to finish the job once and for all. So, don't be long with the next part, Debs, I think it will be an exciting one. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you, sweet Sandra. :)
Blessings!
Comment from royowen
One can't really blame someone who knows how ruthless these Lehman brothers are, but somehow they will be hovering in the back of his, and likewise Jack's mind. Although nothing has really happened since they come back from the hospital, one can still feel the tension. Well done, Deb, good scribing, blessings Roy
Typo : Cody sat on the edge of (the) bed.
2 : The(re) were the two remaining Lehman brothers
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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One can't really blame someone who knows how ruthless these Lehman brothers are, but somehow they will be hovering in the back of his, and likewise Jack's mind. Although nothing has really happened since they come back from the hospital, one can still feel the tension. Well done, Deb, good scribing, blessings Roy
Typo : Cody sat on the edge of (the) bed.
2 : The(re) were the two remaining Lehman brothers
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the catch, Roy. :)
Blessings!
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Boy, that Cody is so stubborn! Yet, I appreciate that he is also vigilant and wants to take care of his family. Good section which shows the tension in the family and how they are on edge and ready for any attack.
Question:
Well, the summary is getting noger, (What does noger mean?)
Comments:
She was hushed by both Jack and 'Lane, (Laine)
"Like Mount Everrest, isn't it." (Everest)
imagine it from cody's perspective. (Cody's)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Boy, that Cody is so stubborn! Yet, I appreciate that he is also vigilant and wants to take care of his family. Good section which shows the tension in the family and how they are on edge and ready for any attack.
Question:
Well, the summary is getting noger, (What does noger mean?)
Comments:
She was hushed by both Jack and 'Lane, (Laine)
"Like Mount Everrest, isn't it." (Everest)
imagine it from cody's perspective. (Cody's)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the review, Helen, for both the catches and the encouragement are appreciated.
'Noger' is my dyslexic fingers trying to type 'longer'. lol. Sorry for the confusion.
Again, thank you!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(typos: fivist s/b visit; thatnever s/b that never)
Fast-paced, suspenseful--skillfully narrated, excellent depiction of characters and believable dialog. Nice touch with the bitter pills--been there--yuck! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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(typos: fivist s/b visit; thatnever s/b that never)
Fast-paced, suspenseful--skillfully narrated, excellent depiction of characters and believable dialog. Nice touch with the bitter pills--been there--yuck! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Liz! Appreciate the great review and comments. Thank you for finding those misspellings. :)
Blessings,
Deb