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Review for The Man With One Red Clog
by Bill Schott
I really enjoyed reading your story, but I have a couple of questions that came to mind as I was enjoying your brilliant story that I read and had questions about. When you mentioned that the woman dyed her hair, did you mean she killed her hair? Also, when the dog fell under the bus, did you mean that the cow jumped over the moon? I think your story would be better if the main character's name was Fred, because that reminds people of Fred Mertz from I Love Lucy and he was quite funny. You spelled antidisestablishmentarianism wrong also.
I really enjoyed reading your story, but I have a couple of questions that came to mind as I was enjoying your brilliant story that I read and had questions about. When you mentioned that the woman dyed her hair, did you mean she killed her hair? Also, when the dog fell under the bus, did you mean that the cow jumped over the moon? I think your story would be better if the main character's name was Fred, because that reminds people of Fred Mertz from I Love Lucy and he was quite funny. You spelled antidisestablishmentarianism wrong also.
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