Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted December 13, 2022


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Shades of Empty

by BethShelby

Welcome echoes from my past
I've come to call on you at last
Because a memory gently taunting
Has made me victim of a haunting
And the wound which scars my heart
Is a part
Bound by the shades of empty

With troubled thoughts I drift soul-jaded
Through halls where sound has faded
Under halos of the moonlight
I clutch my cloak around me in the night
Then my ears are pierced by the scream of a dying child
The echoes pile
Around the shades of empty

And in the fractured haze I knew
The thousand things I'd hoped were true
Things assumed without knowing
Things seen without them showing
Things in diaries never shared
I'd not dared
Erase the shades of empty

"Soul", I cried "You cannot see
How keeping silent troubles me."
Seize my hand that I might feel you
Let me understand the real you
But my thoughts like feathers flew
Settling on the shades of empty

Then the troubled masses swarmed
Toward the totum they had formed
And the sirens wailed disaster
In a world declining faster
The words of wisdom which we read were written across the the darkening sky
"The time is nigh"
They evaporated like the shades of empty
 
I never understood what this song really meant but I found the melody haunting. This one will be the same. It it make no sense, don't let it bother you.

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