General Poetry posted July 16, 2022


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A Trijan Refrain poem

The Albatross

by damommy

I watch the baby albatross
and see he’s all alone
while gentle breezes blow across
and keep his feathers blown.
He’s at a loss for what to do.
His mother came, away she flew.
He’s at a loss
He’s at a loss
To fly, he has no clue.
 
I watch the baby albatross
who never leaves his nest.
He looks around and all across,
his puzzled thoughts expressed.
Where are the others just like him?
There must be many more of them.
Where are the ones
Where are the ones
who left him there among the stems.
 
I watch the baby albatross,
and see him fall asleep.
While in his dreams, gives wings a toss,
above his back they sweep.
And soon he’ll be a grown-up bird
with all his birdy instincts stirred.
And soon he’ll be
And soon he’ll be
off on the wing, his nature spurred.



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I've been watching the Royal Albatross in New Zealand for months, waiting for him to make his first flight. He's alone most of the time, but mother brings food.

The Trijan Refrain consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas. A variation of the form is to NOT repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
the first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the
double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: ababccddc
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4/4/8

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