Charity Begins at Home
A strained relationship can improve over time.5 total reviews
Comment from zanya
It works very well with a few strands for the reader to engage with and has a distinctly authentic tone. If fits well with the idea of 'Feel Good story theme.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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It works very well with a few strands for the reader to engage with and has a distinctly authentic tone. If fits well with the idea of 'Feel Good story theme.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Zanya for this positive review and high star rating. I had a lot of fun with this one. Building characters is something I really enjoy in a short story format.
Comment from pome lover
very good. You didn't tell all the main points at the beginning, but played them out over the course of the story. Good writing and definitely a feel good story.
I wish that when I was a great deal younger I had tried to help with Habitat, but I definitely would not have been able to climb up scaffolding. No way:)
Katharine
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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very good. You didn't tell all the main points at the beginning, but played them out over the course of the story. Good writing and definitely a feel good story.
I wish that when I was a great deal younger I had tried to help with Habitat, but I definitely would not have been able to climb up scaffolding. No way:)
Katharine
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Katharine for this positive review and high star rating. I had a lot of fun with this one. Building characters is something I really enjoy in a short story format. And yes, stay away from scaffolding! I've been there, albeit many years ago.
Comment from Begin Again
It works! the reader can sense and commiserate with both John and Charlotte and all the difficult times they have faced. Yet, in the end, others game together to lend a helping hand a make a new friend for life. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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It works! the reader can sense and commiserate with both John and Charlotte and all the difficult times they have faced. Yet, in the end, others game together to lend a helping hand a make a new friend for life. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Hi Carol
Thank you for the fine review and high star rating of my story. This one was a pleasure to write, much of what I do has a more somber tone. I guess this one did as well, but the effect was to reach the happy ending following what the characters have had to endure.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
Oh my goodness I love this story. My grandpa used to work on Habitat for Humanity Houses!! Thank you so much for sharing and best of luck with the contest! Happy writing!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Oh my goodness I love this story. My grandpa used to work on Habitat for Humanity Houses!! Thank you so much for sharing and best of luck with the contest! Happy writing!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Lindsey
Thank you so much for the terrific review of my story. This one was a pleasure to write, although none of the characters are remotely biographical in nature. I have to sons and a loving wife and also a decent imagination.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a feel-good story on several levels, yet you kept it real, not syrupy, with some issues and conflict.
I have a few suggestions:
she had to learn somehow he.
("he" at the end seems to be a typo)
teen with close cropped hair
(...close-cropped hair)
Eight minutes later he was being *wrung* through the cash.
(...rung...)
*Also*, he and Charlotte would *also* have to carry the *days* gear further *then* he liked.
(Duplicate "also", ...day's gear...than)
Nice job!
Julie
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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This is a feel-good story on several levels, yet you kept it real, not syrupy, with some issues and conflict.
I have a few suggestions:
she had to learn somehow he.
("he" at the end seems to be a typo)
teen with close cropped hair
(...close-cropped hair)
Eight minutes later he was being *wrung* through the cash.
(...rung...)
*Also*, he and Charlotte would *also* have to carry the *days* gear further *then* he liked.
(Duplicate "also", ...day's gear...than)
Nice job!
Julie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the wonderful review Julie, I'm glad you liked this story. I cleaned up the items you mentioned, thanks for the constructive tips. Yes, I did try to keep this real, there is conflict in life daily, it's all about how we look at and deal with things.
