The Worst Bird Dog in Montana
What the hell would Jesus do?20 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I really liked this story, sometimes the answer to 'would Jesus have done that' and that my friend is not easy to ascertain at, but I loved the way it transpired there was even a confirmation, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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I really liked this story, sometimes the answer to 'would Jesus have done that' and that my friend is not easy to ascertain at, but I loved the way it transpired there was even a confirmation, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. I can easily see why this won a contest. It was full of storytelling, humor and a moral.
Question, did you inherit or take possession of this worst (best) bird dog?
I love the photo. We have nine year old golden retriever.
Be well.
John
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Wow. I can easily see why this won a contest. It was full of storytelling, humor and a moral.
Question, did you inherit or take possession of this worst (best) bird dog?
I love the photo. We have nine year old golden retriever.
Be well.
John
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a good example for others: "Some people claimed Caroline was crazy, but to me, she was just one of those people who wasn't afraid to be themselves." What a sweet story.
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This is a good example for others: "Some people claimed Caroline was crazy, but to me, she was just one of those people who wasn't afraid to be themselves." What a sweet story.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
Comment from Wayne Fowler
You're prob'ly racking up the sixes with this one. Great work.
I expected that you inherited the dog and 'took it out hunting' one last time.
(My dad took my brother and I and our dog out squirrel hunting. When the dog kicked up a rabbit and chased it around us. Dad looked at us and asked if he should. I thought he meant the rabbit.)
Good luck in the contest.
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You're prob'ly racking up the sixes with this one. Great work.
I expected that you inherited the dog and 'took it out hunting' one last time.
(My dad took my brother and I and our dog out squirrel hunting. When the dog kicked up a rabbit and chased it around us. Dad looked at us and asked if he should. I thought he meant the rabbit.)
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
Comment from Jim Wile
This is really a good story. It was sweet, heartwarming, humorous, and had a lesson too. You sound like a very kind man who values people's feelings over rigidity to a principle because there are always exceptions. I think you used good judgment here, and it seems Jesus would agree.
One minor point: In the following two paragraphs, you switched from past tense to present tense:
Then Caroline says, "Oh! Oh!" and she points down to her own dog, Chester. "Take Chester out hunting with you. He's a natural-born bird dog. He'd love to go. Take him, please!"
I look down at this dog and, Geezus Christ. He was flabby, he walked crooked, he drooled constantly, and he always had a goofy look on his face. Despite Caroline's assertions, Chester was not bird dog material.
Probably best to keep it all in past tense for consistency. - Jim
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This is really a good story. It was sweet, heartwarming, humorous, and had a lesson too. You sound like a very kind man who values people's feelings over rigidity to a principle because there are always exceptions. I think you used good judgment here, and it seems Jesus would agree.
One minor point: In the following two paragraphs, you switched from past tense to present tense:
Then Caroline says, "Oh! Oh!" and she points down to her own dog, Chester. "Take Chester out hunting with you. He's a natural-born bird dog. He'd love to go. Take him, please!"
I look down at this dog and, Geezus Christ. He was flabby, he walked crooked, he drooled constantly, and he always had a goofy look on his face. Despite Caroline's assertions, Chester was not bird dog material.
Probably best to keep it all in past tense for consistency. - Jim
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
Comment from Spitfire
Easy to see why this won a storytelling contest. You had me hooked from beginning to end. Great description of Chester. A great ending that pulled the whole story together into a theme.
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Easy to see why this won a storytelling contest. You had me hooked from beginning to end. Great description of Chester. A great ending that pulled the whole story together into a theme.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
Comment from Ulla
Hahaha, I loved this. The story here shows that a white lie is sometimes justified. You made the old lady happy, and although she knew you were lying, you still made her a happy old lady proud of her dog. I can understand why it won, and congratulations. Ulla:)))
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Hahaha, I loved this. The story here shows that a white lie is sometimes justified. You made the old lady happy, and although she knew you were lying, you still made her a happy old lady proud of her dog. I can understand why it won, and congratulations. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, Erik, you have a great story! You tell it well and engage your reader's attention all the way through. But somehow, an accomplished liar, who is a federal investigator sound doesn't sound right. And I'm ain't even a right-wing conspiracy guy. Great job. Terry.
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LOL, Erik, you have a great story! You tell it well and engage your reader's attention all the way through. But somehow, an accomplished liar, who is a federal investigator sound doesn't sound right. And I'm ain't even a right-wing conspiracy guy. Great job. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Narik, very good, very cute. This story had me smile and laughing until the very end. Of special note:
The stupid dog barked at everything in sight, scaring the birds away for miles around.
(Good imagery. I could see the whole scene, and I could relate because, personally, I really dislike dogs that bark constantly. I was just talking about that today.)
Perfect, well-chosen photo. Chester may have been a barker, but he was a beautiful-looking door, sort of like some women--not the brightest, but damn good-looking. Big-teeth smile.
Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
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Hello Narik, very good, very cute. This story had me smile and laughing until the very end. Of special note:
The stupid dog barked at everything in sight, scaring the birds away for miles around.
(Good imagery. I could see the whole scene, and I could relate because, personally, I really dislike dogs that bark constantly. I was just talking about that today.)
Perfect, well-chosen photo. Chester may have been a barker, but he was a beautiful-looking door, sort of like some women--not the brightest, but damn good-looking. Big-teeth smile.
Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
Congratulations on your Houston storytelling win. It was well deserved. Your story is well written, flows well, maintains interest, and has a satisfying ending. It could have been entered into a true story contest on this site as well. I enjoyed reading of your experience.
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Congratulations on your Houston storytelling win. It was well deserved. Your story is well written, flows well, maintains interest, and has a satisfying ending. It could have been entered into a true story contest on this site as well. I enjoyed reading of your experience.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
