Be With Me
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Comment from karenina
I couldn't help but summon up a little melody to softly sing this to...
(No worries, everyone is asleep, and no eardrums were harmed in this process!)
I agree! "So long" seems temporary... As all romantics would want a separation to be!
You've engaged my senses here. I can smell those pine trees!
Beautiful presentation, as well, Craig!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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I couldn't help but summon up a little melody to softly sing this to...
(No worries, everyone is asleep, and no eardrums were harmed in this process!)
I agree! "So long" seems temporary... As all romantics would want a separation to be!
You've engaged my senses here. I can smell those pine trees!
Beautiful presentation, as well, Craig!
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Karenina. So glad you liked it :)
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I'd love to hear what melody you could put to it! That would been awesome!
Comment from rama devi
Congrats on placing in the contest, my friend. This made me smile because it reminds me of an interesting thing about the Indian language, Malayalam, which I used to speak while living in India. They never say 'see you later' but rather politely ask: SHALL I GO AND COME? They even mash up the two verbs, go and come, into one word. It means: I am going, but I'll come back.
The poem is sweet, tender, well rhymed and true to form. Lovely presentation too! All the alliteration augments the artistic awesomeness.
Best Smiles,
rd
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Congrats on placing in the contest, my friend. This made me smile because it reminds me of an interesting thing about the Indian language, Malayalam, which I used to speak while living in India. They never say 'see you later' but rather politely ask: SHALL I GO AND COME? They even mash up the two verbs, go and come, into one word. It means: I am going, but I'll come back.
The poem is sweet, tender, well rhymed and true to form. Lovely presentation too! All the alliteration augments the artistic awesomeness.
Best Smiles,
rd
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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That sounds like a good way to express it to me, RD. It also sounds a bit Schwarzeneggeresque... "I'll be back"! I'm most grateful for your lovely comments. Craig
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Thanks, dear C. Your coining of Schwarzeneggeresque made me chuckle. :-))
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi CD,
I like this poem that seems to talk of a long marriage that is coming to a close because of death. This is a point when goodbye is usually considered appropriate. But maybe so long works too because with faith it is believed we will see them again. I agree the 'so long' seems less final.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Hi CD,
I like this poem that seems to talk of a long marriage that is coming to a close because of death. This is a point when goodbye is usually considered appropriate. But maybe so long works too because with faith it is believed we will see them again. I agree the 'so long' seems less final.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for the thoughtful comments and good wishes, Joan. You have a great weekend too. Craig
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Don't mention it, Craig.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed this lovely, and well-written 3-6-9!! You did a stellar job on the rhyme sequence and the soft, rhythmic anapest meter. I enjoyed it immensely!
Melissa
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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I enjoyed this lovely, and well-written 3-6-9!! You did a stellar job on the rhyme sequence and the soft, rhythmic anapest meter. I enjoyed it immensely!
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much, Melissa. Lovely to hear from you :) Craig
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely sentiments in your 3-6-9 poem Craig and, I tend to agree about goodbye. I tend to say 'see you later' it's almost a promise that we will meet again. Good luck in the contest, I really enjoyed it.cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Lovely sentiments in your 3-6-9 poem Craig and, I tend to agree about goodbye. I tend to say 'see you later' it's almost a promise that we will meet again. Good luck in the contest, I really enjoyed it.cheers
Valda
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the kind comments and the good wishes, Valda. I appreciate both very much. Craig
Comment from strandregs
I like it
Softness is the theme,
Good memories
Devotion and acceptance sweeten the the long final separation.
So long is good.
Cause heaven is where you are... Jolly. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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I like it
Softness is the theme,
Good memories
Devotion and acceptance sweeten the the long final separation.
So long is good.
Cause heaven is where you are... Jolly. :-))Z.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Z :)
I don't get the Jolly reference - is it a song?
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I couldn't remember which song it was from
No wonder
It's been 50 years. ;-))Z.
Climb up, way up high
Climb up, way up high
Climb up, way up high
Well a, well a, well a, heavenly angel
I want you for my girl
When I kissed your sweet, sweet lips
I knew that you were out of this world
I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are
Well a, well a, well a, over the rainbow
That's where I'm gonna climb
Way up high where the bluebirds fly
I'm gonna love you all the time
I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are
I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are
Well a, well a, well a, I gotta be going
Gonna leave the world behind
Every day in a heavenly way
You're gonna drive me outta my mind
I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are
Clim up, way up high
Clim up, way up high
Clim up, way up high...
Writer/s: Jimmy Page, Robert Plant
Publisher: Sony/ATV Music Publishing LLC, Warner Chappell Music, Inc.
Lyrics licensed and provided by LyricFind
And if you want to hear it
https://www.songfacts.com/lyrics/neil-sedaka/stairway-to-heaven
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Haha, cool!
Songfact screwed up though... this is not the Stairway to Heaven written by Page&Plant. That's an entirely different beast. Elsewhere on their own site, they say Sedaka wrote it :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is a bit like Goodbye and au revoir, as Goodbye does sound so final, so I understood your sentiment here and I wish you luck with the contest, an emotional write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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It is a bit like Goodbye and au revoir, as Goodbye does sound so final, so I understood your sentiment here and I wish you luck with the contest, an emotional write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the kind wishes, Dolly. It was prompted by a reaction to losing one of our four-legged family. Cheers, Craig.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-6-9, Be with Me, has the proper formatting and sends the message that someone is wanted near, whenever it is possible, and especially when it is necessary.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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This 3-6-9, Be with Me, has the proper formatting and sends the message that someone is wanted near, whenever it is possible, and especially when it is necessary.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Yep, that is it in a nutshell. Thanks Bill.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad you used "so long" - there's something optimistic and comforting about that - reuniting even after one is no longer "drawing breath." Enjoyed the structure of your poem with the short verb-with-me first lines and rhyming last lines. Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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I'm glad you used "so long" - there's something optimistic and comforting about that - reuniting even after one is no longer "drawing breath." Enjoyed the structure of your poem with the short verb-with-me first lines and rhyming last lines. Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much, Helen. I didn't find it an easy style. I appreciate your kind comments. Craig
Comment from Ulla
Hi Graig, I couldn't agree more. Goodbye is such a definite word. In this context, it spells the end with no future as opposed to 'so long'. Such a wonderful declaration of love in this short poem. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Hi Graig, I couldn't agree more. Goodbye is such a definite word. In this context, it spells the end with no future as opposed to 'so long'. Such a wonderful declaration of love in this short poem. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Hi Ulla,
Sorry to hear via Pam's poem about your brother's heart trouble. I hope all goes smoothly when he has his surgery. Thanks for the kind words and good wishes :) Craig
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Thank you so much, Craig. He's only 52. 52. It is such a big worry. :)