Smile
What's the use of Crying32 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Janet,
This poem uses music as a metaphor for memories and reminds us how they can be happy or sad. But, we can always put a smile on and be thankful for something.
This also has a feeling of someone suffering from depression.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Congrats on being the recognized writer
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Hi Janet,
This poem uses music as a metaphor for memories and reminds us how they can be happy or sad. But, we can always put a smile on and be thankful for something.
This also has a feeling of someone suffering from depression.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Congrats on being the recognized writer
Joan
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thank you Joan for you thoughtful and kind review. Just going through some "stuff" right now. My husband is going to have a valve replaced in his heart on May 3th, then he needs a knee replaced and some potential skin cancers removed. So not depressed, but definitely concerned. Thankfully we put our trust in our Savior and we will get through this. Thank you again for your kind words and congratulations.
Blessings
J
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Hi Janet,
You're welcome. I will pray that everything will go well for your husband. I can empathize. My brother in law is going in for brain surgery on May 1st and then he also has to have his knees replaced.
Joan
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully written and illustrated poem of the songs we sing that never go away. They are like old friends and return to comfort us. A sweet poem in crafted by your talented hand.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Beautifully written and illustrated poem of the songs we sing that never go away. They are like old friends and return to comfort us. A sweet poem in crafted by your talented hand.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Sal for this stellar review and kind words. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the special stars.
Blessings and smiles my friend.
Janet
Comment from Destiny Awaits Darling
Janet,
This poem of yours really resonated with me. ð??? For whatever reason, I feel like us 'writers'/'creatives' tend to struggle with insomnia more than others-- sometimes, I view being awake for these 'lonely hours' of the night as a gift, but sometimes I can't help but feel the loneliness seeping into my bones. It's a love-hate relationship that you described {b}perfectly{/b} in this poem.
As someone who struggles with severe depression, I know how it feels to spend the whole night crying-- silently begging God to give me some kind of sign that I still have a purpose. From your notes, and from your poem, I can tell that you have also spent a few nights doing the same thing. I know we don't know each other, but I just feel like I should tell you: I am SO GLAD that you exist! Just by reading this one poem, and the 'author's notes' you wrote at the bottom-- I can tell that you are the kind of person that brings light to other people's lives. YOU are someone who puts a smile on people's faces when they see you. YOU MATTER. ð?«? Never forget that, and never stop writing because you are spreading your light with your talent! ð???
Great work, and lovely rhyme scheme! Your last stanza, and the lyrics from the song you shared in your notes, have lifted my spirits and inspired me. I love the message at the end of your poem-- as long as we have breath in our lungs, and gratefulness in our hearts, we will live to smile again, on a brighter day.
Powerful. ð?¥¹
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Janet,
This poem of yours really resonated with me. ð??? For whatever reason, I feel like us 'writers'/'creatives' tend to struggle with insomnia more than others-- sometimes, I view being awake for these 'lonely hours' of the night as a gift, but sometimes I can't help but feel the loneliness seeping into my bones. It's a love-hate relationship that you described {b}perfectly{/b} in this poem.
As someone who struggles with severe depression, I know how it feels to spend the whole night crying-- silently begging God to give me some kind of sign that I still have a purpose. From your notes, and from your poem, I can tell that you have also spent a few nights doing the same thing. I know we don't know each other, but I just feel like I should tell you: I am SO GLAD that you exist! Just by reading this one poem, and the 'author's notes' you wrote at the bottom-- I can tell that you are the kind of person that brings light to other people's lives. YOU are someone who puts a smile on people's faces when they see you. YOU MATTER. ð?«? Never forget that, and never stop writing because you are spreading your light with your talent! ð???
Great work, and lovely rhyme scheme! Your last stanza, and the lyrics from the song you shared in your notes, have lifted my spirits and inspired me. I love the message at the end of your poem-- as long as we have breath in our lungs, and gratefulness in our hearts, we will live to smile again, on a brighter day.
Powerful. ð?¥¹
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Destiny for this stellar review kind thoughts. Thank you for sharing your struggles and know that you are not alone. Writing is cathartic and often lifts our spirits to put in all on the page.
I'm so pleased that this one resonated with you and I wish you all the best as well.
Blessings and smiles
Janet
Comment from Alan Tryens
Janet, at first I didn't understand why you titled you poem "Smile". You obviously had lost someone in your life and if so I'm sorry for you did, then I see the Nat King Cole reference and it makes sense. "The mem'ry of a lullaby", not sure if you were the singer or receiver of that. The rhyming did not seem forced, the poem flowed well. At 73 I have experienced loss and grief and I can defiantly relate to the sorrow you write about. Good luck with the Rhyming poetry contest. Your poem was well written.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Janet, at first I didn't understand why you titled you poem "Smile". You obviously had lost someone in your life and if so I'm sorry for you did, then I see the Nat King Cole reference and it makes sense. "The mem'ry of a lullaby", not sure if you were the singer or receiver of that. The rhyming did not seem forced, the poem flowed well. At 73 I have experienced loss and grief and I can defiantly relate to the sorrow you write about. Good luck with the Rhyming poetry contest. Your poem was well written.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Alan for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings and smiles
Janet
Comment from karenina
This is beautifully penned, Janet. Before reviewing I hopped on over to YouTube to marinate in the beautiful rendition of this song by the inimitable Nat King Cole.
Your rhymes are spot on, and your meter is even, without a stumble (as I read your words out loud!)---
in my younger days, I used to think this was an anthem about NOT allowing our emotions to show.
With age has come some perspective, I hope.
Of course, we all have sorrow...but as you've said perfectly in your poem's final stanza:
"Before the sun begins to rise
I'll dry my tears away.
And thank the one who gave me breath--
and smile another day."
How treasured are these smiles once we've wiped our tears away?
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is beautifully penned, Janet. Before reviewing I hopped on over to YouTube to marinate in the beautiful rendition of this song by the inimitable Nat King Cole.
Your rhymes are spot on, and your meter is even, without a stumble (as I read your words out loud!)---
in my younger days, I used to think this was an anthem about NOT allowing our emotions to show.
With age has come some perspective, I hope.
Of course, we all have sorrow...but as you've said perfectly in your poem's final stanza:
"Before the sun begins to rise
I'll dry my tears away.
And thank the one who gave me breath--
and smile another day."
How treasured are these smiles once we've wiped our tears away?
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank your Karenina for this stellar review. Your thoughts and views are always appreciate. You are so right, our perspective changes with age and we hope for the better. (smile)
Blessings
Janet
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Hope....ah, as a Dickinson fan I know "Hope is the thing with feathers!"
:)
Comment from nomi338
The ability to smile and count yourself fortunate to have and enjoy the breath shows a maturity and an understanding of what is truly important in life. No matter how bitter the disappointment, the gift of life allows a swift turnaround lifting one high above the darkest of times and th deepest pit of grief and remorse.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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The ability to smile and count yourself fortunate to have and enjoy the breath shows a maturity and an understanding of what is truly important in life. No matter how bitter the disappointment, the gift of life allows a swift turnaround lifting one high above the darkest of times and th deepest pit of grief and remorse.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you nomi for your stellar review and encouraging comments.
Greatly appreciated.(smile)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from JT traveller
Absolutely delightful poem inspired by a great singer. Full of melancholic lines but also hope for a better day tomorrow. The meter is spot on and your poem piqued my interest for more. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Absolutely delightful poem inspired by a great singer. Full of melancholic lines but also hope for a better day tomorrow. The meter is spot on and your poem piqued my interest for more. Jacqueline
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Jacqueline for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings and smiles
Janet
Comment from Teri7
Janet, This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive and good rhyming words. Very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I love that song too! Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Janet, This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive and good rhyming words. Very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. I love that song too! Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Teri for this thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings and smiles
Janet
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Janet, You are so welcome! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Thesis
I agree that this post reflects a bittersweet consciousness that when your mind wanders or dreams, a myriad of memories and emotions escape their hidden places in one's brain. I read this several times and it made me realize a smile can change many things.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I agree that this post reflects a bittersweet consciousness that when your mind wanders or dreams, a myriad of memories and emotions escape their hidden places in one's brain. I read this several times and it made me realize a smile can change many things.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. I too believe that a smile can change many things. I like that when you smile at someone, you usually get one back.
Blessings and smiles
Janet
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great rhyming and so easy to read. Life brings us tears at times, but if we can learn to smile and trust the Lord, we can make it through. I thought of that scripture, "weeping may endure for a night, but joy comes in the morning."
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Great rhyming and so easy to read. Life brings us tears at times, but if we can learn to smile and trust the Lord, we can make it through. I thought of that scripture, "weeping may endure for a night, but joy comes in the morning."
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you Anne for this stellar review, the special sixth star and the scripture that rings true and helps us get through a difficult day.
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome, Janet
