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Dear God

One mans facetious offer to HELP God.

31 total reviews 
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
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Reading your down-to-earth letter to God made me feel validated in my belief that God wants us to talk to Him from our hearts rather than speak/write formal, automatic words with little feeling or true connection.

I really enjoyed the humor; all good things come from our Creator, and humor is good for the soul.

The humble expression of sadness conveyed told of your faith as you acknowledged God's wisdom in all things, even without the understanding of the why's. It showed, too, your knowledge that your two little babes were tucked safe in the shadow of God's wings. (I am sincerely sorry for your and your wife's loss.)

I love the interspersed messages throughout your story as to the attributes of God and His love.

I can't imagine what God must be thinking of His earthly world right now. Thank you for sharing the story.

Gale

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
    Thank you for your thoughtful review and five stars lovely stars. I believe I inadvertently failed to thank you for this review from last year.
Comment from Carlos' girl
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This is special. I really enjoyed it and it got me thinking. Sometimes I get into Conversations With God and it is a trip. Thank you for sharing and may the Lord be with you.


 Comment Written 06-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    I OWE YOU A HUGE APOLOGY AND I AM SO SORRY IT HAS TAKEN ME SO VERY VERY LONG TO RESPOND TO YOUR VERY KIND, WONDERFUL REVIEW AND THOSE FIVE EXCELLENT STARS YOU GAVE ME. Sorry for the, I just noticed that the caps was pushed down. I wasn't yelling at you. Lol I hear what you're saying and I agree. Conversations with God our challenging but also rewarding. May the Lord be with you as well.
reply by Carlos' girl on 22-Apr-2023
    No worries. Thank you for reply
Comment from Terry Broxson
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Your story is a good one for this contest. You touch on not only a variety of subjects, but you do so with humor, passion, and genuine thought of trying to understand. Well done, and good luck in the contest. By the way, you might take a look at a contest I just created, A Letter from God. Terry.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Hey Terry, first let me apologize to you for taking so very long to get back with you and express my appreciation for those five excellent stars you gave me. I just don't get to FanStory very often these days. I'm trying to figure out a way to make enough money writing to cover my writing expenses lol. It would be nice to at least break even. Thank you for your kind words. I'm sorry I never made it over to your contest creation. Hopefully next time.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I liked the flow of the story herein but why do the talking points begin with you instead of I? I got confused as well with asking about the children's gender?
What ever happened to your planned vlog?

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    First of all Tom let me say I'm sorry it's taking me so long to thank you for this review. I'm spending very little time on FanStory these days. I'd like to thank you for the five excellent stars you gave me. As to the question concerning the talking points my vantage point is my talking to God telling God this is what you need. The reason I ask about the children's gender is because my wife and I had two miscarriages and they were in the first trimester so we don't know what gender they are. We will find out when we meet them in heaven. Then, Tom, there is that Vlog thing. L O L It is still on the stove but I'm afraid it's on the back burner my brother.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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This is very good really, very good. I like your approach. I think it's very realistic and relevant to the people today absolutely. It's easy to read I don't have to guess what you're saying.
Very. Real and fundamental? Questions. That you ask it goes to the agent one that says "Why"
And for your loss and for your wife's loss my condolences.
This is very well written very well-thought-out. Am I your grammar and consolation? Everything is really good I congratulate you on a very good submission.
I hope you have a good night!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Sorry to be so very very long and returning my thank you. I am in and out of FanStory and two off and I'm rude to those who have been so kind as to write a review of my work. Your review was thorough and heart touching in kindness. My hope was that it would resonate with some people that aren't into God, but may be turning to God.
    Thank you so much for the five excellent stars and God bless you.
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 11-Apr-2023
    Anytime thank you!
Comment from Ricky1024
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Dear God Contest Entry.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Note: The loss of a child before even having a chance. To me is almost a sin.
I know when I lost my 18-year-old March 31st, 2003.
It destroyed my wife Carolyn on November 23rd, 2003.
And on that day at 8:30 PM.
And, still almost 20 years later.
I died.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    I am Sorry to be so very very long and returning my thank you. I am in and out of FanStory and two off and I'm rude to those who have been so kind as to write a review of my work. Your review was very thorough and meaningful along with personal. Thank you so much for your five excellent stars and your vulnerability concerning your own son.
Comment from mrsmajor
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A very interesting and thought filled entry for the contest...I can appreciate many of your questions, and yes I do believe many do have the same thoughts...For me it's my faith in a living God, that has given me the courage to deal with the happenings of this ungodly world..l lost my oldest son last may, and without the understanding of the Bible teachings, much of that found in the book of revelations, I might not have been able to deal with such a loss...
God has promised us so much more than what we call life here on earth.

Your thoughts, comments, and questions were those many of us also think about...But for me, the answers have come from years of Bible study.Though perfect none of us will ever be, all we can do is try!
Although your post was long, I read it all...I've been here on Fanstory since Oct. 2004, that's 18 years, and It's always a pleasure reading posts that actually speak to the very reason for life itself...
Good luck in the contests.
Blessings,

Warmly,
Victoria

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Sorry to be so very very long and returning my thank you. I am in and out of FanStory and two off and I'm rude to those who have been so kind as to write a review of my work. Thank you so much for the five beautiful stars.
reply by mrsmajor on 11-Apr-2023
    You'r very welcome, it was my pleasure...I hope all is well...Take Care...Blessings!
    Victoria
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Just BUSY! LOL
Comment from Tpa
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Your beginning statement was so true. Indeed, this world has become a mess in all stages. God has given us so much, especially 'free will', which many used unwisely. We can only pray that someday we can live in harmony and abide by His rules and attain his promises. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review my letter to God. I appreciate your kind words and thoughts. Thank you also for the wonderful five star rating.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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This is very well thought out and put together nicely.

I really liked the P.S. and P.S.S. At the ending.

You are a witty magical unicorn Sir!!!

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
    Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my letter to God. I appreciate you taking the time to review it and then to read it five excellent stars. Blessings.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Yes, many Christians have stopped reading the Bible. Many feel it's they're discriminated against for being a Christian. They're afraid to admit it. We, as Christians, need to take a stand and say enough is enough. Good luck with the contest.

I think you know that more and more people are skeptical of your authorship and frankly, less and less people are reading it. (You can omit 'that'. It's an extra word and not needed.)

Gideons are having a lot harder time putting bibles in hotels these days. (Bible is always capitalized.)

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
    Hey Barbara, thank you so very much for showing up and reading my letter to God. Not only did you read it, but you reviewed it and you gave me a beautiful five star excellent rating. Thank you for your kind words.

    I'm going to change the subject!

    When I first came to span store nine years ago it seemed to me that there were a lot of people who were very willing to critique my work and tell me about the little things like capitalizing a word or putting a space here or a comma there or all together omitting a word. It didn't make me upset but it was frustrating. Today, I'm thankful for those who take the time to point out the little things. The truth is I am definitely a better rider today because of fans story and people like you Barbara. The two things you pointed out to me, I did not catch, and I'm glad you did. The truth is, although I what is an English major in college, it's been a long time. LOL I see very little critique anymore I see a whole lot of commentary, I guess they both have their place and I am thankful for each of them. Embrace the love from above.
reply by barbara.wilkey on 01-Mar-2023
    I joined back in 2008. I do understand what you're saying. I post because I want people to catch my mistakes. That's how I learn. I want the help, so I give as much help as I can. It's not always well received. LOL
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
    I hear you Barbara lol. Real often by reading you can tell if somebody is a good writer and wanting to get better, or really does not have the skills to improve. Sometimes I wonder about myself. Blessings and thanks again.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
    I hear you Barbara lol. Real often by reading you can tell if somebody is a good writer and wanting to get better, or really does not have the skills to improve. Sometimes I wonder about myself. Blessings and thanks again.