One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Fei Ma
It is classic, and crispy clean like the air in the picture. Every word is wonderfully selected, and beautiful. In my view it is a perfect 5/4/5. It just cannot be better. Totally love it!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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It is classic, and crispy clean like the air in the picture. Every word is wonderfully selected, and beautiful. In my view it is a perfect 5/4/5. It just cannot be better. Totally love it!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Fei, wow! a second exceptional six stars review... I appreciate it, my friend. Hugs.
Gypsy
"The poet waits to paint the unsaid." ?Atticus
Comment from kahpot
Love this one, "untouched by men" and "frigid virgin" are so very descriptive and give an excellent image, enhancing the artwork, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Love this one, "untouched by men" and "frigid virgin" are so very descriptive and give an excellent image, enhancing the artwork, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Kym
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem- good presentation- picture- good notes- very informative- interesting- use of words- untouched by men instead of man - and for good reason-43 below zero will do it every time/ good job
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I like your poem- good presentation- picture- good notes- very informative- interesting- use of words- untouched by men instead of man - and for good reason-43 below zero will do it every time/ good job
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----you said virgin, eh, ha, ha----and a cold one at that, brr, although with climate change, it's probaby a paradise vacation destination!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----you said virgin, eh, ha, ha----and a cold one at that, brr, although with climate change, it's probaby a paradise vacation destination!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from aryr
What a great picture of the frozen tundra, Gypsy. Your words seemed to catch the art of frozen land. I really took no offense to your wording. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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What a great picture of the frozen tundra, Gypsy. Your words seemed to catch the art of frozen land. I really took no offense to your wording. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback. Blessed be and hugs.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
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You are most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Love the description and wordplay, Gypsy!
You are truly the master of modern haiku.
Just a thought: Would "land's frigid virgin" make your satori stronger?
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Love the description and wordplay, Gypsy!
You are truly the master of modern haiku.
Just a thought: Would "land's frigid virgin" make your satori stronger?
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Diane
Thank you very much for your time, exceptional six stars review, and helpfull feedback. I fixed the satori, it's much better.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I love the simile, frigid virgin land and untouched by men. It looks like Finland or Antarctica. It's a good day to write a winter Haiku because it's so hot today in most parts of the world except for LA and San Diego.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I love the simile, frigid virgin land and untouched by men. It looks like Finland or Antarctica. It's a good day to write a winter Haiku because it's so hot today in most parts of the world except for LA and San Diego.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
I live in pasadena, close to Los Angeles... we have pretty good weather. My daughter went to Sacramento, in Central California, and it was 104 degrees!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, your photo is beautiful and it made me smile. I'm 50% Russian, and my mother always use to say that she was going to send my father to Siberia. Your poem has good imagery and alliteration. I especially liked:
frigid virgin land
(G, if global warming continues, even Siberia will start to melt.
Great satori line.)
A pleasure to read. I like the blue gray font. Great presentation. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Hi Gypsy, your photo is beautiful and it made me smile. I'm 50% Russian, and my mother always use to say that she was going to send my father to Siberia. Your poem has good imagery and alliteration. I especially liked:
frigid virgin land
(G, if global warming continues, even Siberia will start to melt.
Great satori line.)
A pleasure to read. I like the blue gray font. Great presentation. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
You're 50 % Russian, that's so interesting...I'm 100% Spanish but I live in Southern California. I like your mom's sense of humor. LoL hahaha
I live in pasadena, close to Los Angeles... we have pretty good weather. My daughter went to Sacramento, in Central California, and it was 104 degrees!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
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I'm 50% Russian and 50% Irish. God has blessed me and cursed me with the best and worst of each culture. Lol. 104 temp is unbearable.
Ughh. Hopefully, your daughter has adequate a/c. Xo. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment from lyenochka
That's a super picture! I like your word play about the "frigid virgin land." I hope it does stay free from human encroachment so all the wildlife survives!
In your notes:
There are moos, fox, sable (moose?)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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That's a super picture! I like your word play about the "frigid virgin land." I hope it does stay free from human encroachment so all the wildlife survives!
In your notes:
There are moos, fox, sable (moose?)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I copied and pasted my author notes...something got lost....It's fixed now, thank you!
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
One can feel the cold air on the desolate tundra through your verse. There is an intended or unintended connect between men and virgin in your few words. Your icy blue colorings is an allusion to the coldness.
Personally, I think you can use 'man' instead of 'men.' IMHO, it is a generic meaning for more than one (human being).
Mark
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Gypsy,
One can feel the cold air on the desolate tundra through your verse. There is an intended or unintended connect between men and virgin in your few words. Your icy blue colorings is an allusion to the coldness.
Personally, I think you can use 'man' instead of 'men.' IMHO, it is a generic meaning for more than one (human being).
Mark
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I meant 'men' more than one man
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis