One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from padumachitta
hey
ah spring. It is hiding behind the shirt tales of it's Uncle late winter acting like Nov ... flowers are coming, but slow...and no big trumpets here...
I hope you are well out west and have had your covid shots...
yours pc
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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hey
ah spring. It is hiding behind the shirt tales of it's Uncle late winter acting like Nov ... flowers are coming, but slow...and no big trumpets here...
I hope you are well out west and have had your covid shots...
yours pc
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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I had my shots and last weekend I saw all family...it was great. On the way back home my daughter and I had a car accident but we are okay. The car was total lost.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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oh my. I am glad you are ok. i hope you had insurance. Was it your fault or the other person's...not that it really matters. It's all just a huge shock...
I am glad you have had your shots...I get my next one the second week of June...
Comment from juliaSjames
Love your choice of artwork and the poem, Gypsy. The satori plays well ;-)) with both the trumpet analogy and with the concept of springtime as renewal.
Looking forward to taking up the club challenge.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Love your choice of artwork and the poem, Gypsy. The satori plays well ;-)) with both the trumpet analogy and with the concept of springtime as renewal.
Looking forward to taking up the club challenge.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Since your author note capitalizes the name of this flower, I would consider editing the same in your text. Capitalize Springtime?
As you often note that traditional Haiku does not always have 5-7-5 syllables, below is my edit of your Ekphrastic Haiku post.
Mark
Angel Trumpets (sic)
blossom in the springtime (sic) --
its rhythm of life
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Gypsy,
Since your author note capitalizes the name of this flower, I would consider editing the same in your text. Capitalize Springtime?
As you often note that traditional Haiku does not always have 5-7-5 syllables, below is my edit of your Ekphrastic Haiku post.
Mark
Angel Trumpets (sic)
blossom in the springtime (sic) --
its rhythm of life
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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I capitalized angel trumpets in my author notes to make them stand out. angel trumpets are common nouns ...flowers that don't need to be capitalized.
The seasons?winter, spring, summer and fall?do not require capitalization.
I don't like your rewrite.
Thank you very much for your review.
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Gypsy,
Your comments are easily accepted by me - you are the poet and not me. But your Springtime is capitalized in your post.
Mark
Comment from lyenochka
They are gorgeous plants! It's good to know that they are toxic. Thanks for sharing that information. I like how your second line can be taken two ways about the plant and about the announcement of spring.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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They are gorgeous plants! It's good to know that they are toxic. Thanks for sharing that information. I like how your second line can be taken two ways about the plant and about the announcement of spring.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Helen.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Raul1
I like how you structured your haiku poem. It's beautifully written. Well written. I like it very much. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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I like how you structured your haiku poem. It's beautifully written. Well written. I like it very much. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you
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You're welcome
Comment from roof35
As always, you have written a lovely and perfect Haiku. Your picture illustrates you words perfectly. I think these trumpet trees sometimes have yellow blossoms.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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As always, you have written a lovely and perfect Haiku. Your picture illustrates you words perfectly. I think these trumpet trees sometimes have yellow blossoms.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Dear Gypsy, your EKPHRASTIC Haiku work was a perfect description of the accompanying image. I love your mastery of this kind of writing. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Dear Gypsy, your EKPHRASTIC Haiku work was a perfect description of the accompanying image. I love your mastery of this kind of writing. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
I really enjoyed reading your spring ekphrastic haiku.
Your words really capture the essence of the artwork - which is beautiful!
I love the presentation also - that green text yells 'spring' at me!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Hello Gypsy :)
I really enjoyed reading your spring ekphrastic haiku.
Your words really capture the essence of the artwork - which is beautiful!
I love the presentation also - that green text yells 'spring' at me!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words... Debra.
Gypsy
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You're welcome x
