Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "part four, chapter 17"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. This 'part-chapter' is so exciting. Seems that Anna and Michael are still on the run. I wonder whether the many happenings will take its toll to the child, eventually. Interesting, heart throbbing chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi, Barbara. This 'part-chapter' is so exciting. Seems that Anna and Michael are still on the run. I wonder whether the many happenings will take its toll to the child, eventually. Interesting, heart throbbing chapter.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
Wow! These people will stop at nothing. She should have driven to the nearest police station when she saw what happened to Sam. This woman is living in a nightmare situation. Well written, Barbara.
April
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Wow! These people will stop at nothing. She should have driven to the nearest police station when she saw what happened to Sam. This woman is living in a nightmare situation. Well written, Barbara.
April
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is another well-written chapter in which you have built up the tension towards the end, resulting in a devastating situation for Anna and her baby son Michael who is on the other side of her front-door.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - and won't take no for answer." I suggest -
won't take no for an answer."
* You have - at the third stoplight a car pulled in front ... I suggest - at the third stop-light, a car pulled in front ...
Now, I look forward to the continuation of your story.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is another well-written chapter in which you have built up the tension towards the end, resulting in a devastating situation for Anna and her baby son Michael who is on the other side of her front-door.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - and won't take no for answer." I suggest -
won't take no for an answer."
* You have - at the third stoplight a car pulled in front ... I suggest - at the third stop-light, a car pulled in front ...
Now, I look forward to the continuation of your story.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from JW
This is a very well written chapter. Or should I say part of a chapter. Either way, it keeps a reader on the edge of their seat and leaves with with a hook where they cannot wait for more.
Great job. JW
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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This is a very well written chapter. Or should I say part of a chapter. Either way, it keeps a reader on the edge of their seat and leaves with with a hook where they cannot wait for more.
Great job. JW
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Oh Dear, Barbara,
Now I am really afraid for Anna and little Michael too. I thought sure they would be alright with Sam following behind them. The suspense in this chapter has me on the edge of my seat and I was afraid you were going to leave me hanging and you did! I can't wait to see what happens next and I hope I don't have to wait too long. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Oh Dear, Barbara,
Now I am really afraid for Anna and little Michael too. I thought sure they would be alright with Sam following behind them. The suspense in this chapter has me on the edge of my seat and I was afraid you were going to leave me hanging and you did! I can't wait to see what happens next and I hope I don't have to wait too long. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
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You are welcome. It deserved at least a six!
Comment from smudge
A well written chapter. A man tried to collect Anna's child. She thought she was being followed home and dialed 911. A man pushed her in and attacked her.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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A well written chapter. A man tried to collect Anna's child. She thought she was being followed home and dialed 911. A man pushed her in and attacked her.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I just shudder at these stories, having lived them myself. God love you for exposing this heinous problem. It can never get too much publicity. I am glad you ended the poem as you did, for I was too upset to read more.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I just shudder at these stories, having lived them myself. God love you for exposing this heinous problem. It can never get too much publicity. I am glad you ended the poem as you did, for I was too upset to read more.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Great chapter, Barbara. You had me on the edge of my seat with this one.
"As long as I can continue working, Sam can be where ever (wherever) he wants."
Mr. Keller's voice was heard in (the) lobby,
Then she glanced back at Mr. Keller. (")Thank you."
She glanced in her rear view mirror and saw the white pickup pull alongside Sam's black car and crossed (cross) into Sam's lane.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Great chapter, Barbara. You had me on the edge of my seat with this one.
"As long as I can continue working, Sam can be where ever (wherever) he wants."
Mr. Keller's voice was heard in (the) lobby,
Then she glanced back at Mr. Keller. (")Thank you."
She glanced in her rear view mirror and saw the white pickup pull alongside Sam's black car and crossed (cross) into Sam's lane.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I orginally had cross, then changed it. DARN!!! Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Janie King
Holy Moses, I can't wait until the weekend to read the next chapter. I hope since this one has appeared early that you may be on spring break...cheat..tell me if they are both okay..it's okay to cheat and tell me..God bless.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Holy Moses, I can't wait until the weekend to read the next chapter. I hope since this one has appeared early that you may be on spring break...cheat..tell me if they are both okay..it's okay to cheat and tell me..God bless.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Tammara
WOW...What An intense scary situation Anna is in! Michael crawling away outside and Anna locked in her house with an unknown man. Sam's car crashed into a tree! OMG, I can wait for the next chapter to see what happens next! I am going to be waiting for it impatiently...lol. Great chapter! :)
Tammara
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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WOW...What An intense scary situation Anna is in! Michael crawling away outside and Anna locked in her house with an unknown man. Sam's car crashed into a tree! OMG, I can wait for the next chapter to see what happens next! I am going to be waiting for it impatiently...lol. Great chapter! :)
Tammara
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
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You are very welcome! :)
