Your Honour
200 word flash fiction63 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful story that shows the reader some vivid pictures, especially of the accused lady. I guess she bribed her way to victory by using her body to entice the judge. well done
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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This is a beautiful story that shows the reader some vivid pictures, especially of the accused lady. I guess she bribed her way to victory by using her body to entice the judge. well done
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Llewellyn2012
Enjoyable read full of tense courtroom drama, You told your entire story with the contest limit and wisely used the required words, such that they blended so well with the story. Good luck in the booth.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Enjoyable read full of tense courtroom drama, You told your entire story with the contest limit and wisely used the required words, such that they blended so well with the story. Good luck in the booth.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from TreTyler
Very nice ending. I couldn't help but smile when I read it. It is hard to put together a brief story in 200 words but you did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Very nice ending. I couldn't help but smile when I read it. It is hard to put together a brief story in 200 words but you did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from MumEsGirl
I quite enjoyed the liberties you took. Well written holding the readers attention from the start.
I partly guessed that she was guilty, but never expected the clever twist at the end.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I quite enjoyed the liberties you took. Well written holding the readers attention from the start.
I partly guessed that she was guilty, but never expected the clever twist at the end.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you, Kate!
Steve
Comment from hurkad
You have managed to incorporate the required words very nicely in the story. Well written, with a good flow.
Nice twist in the end:-)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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You have managed to incorporate the required words very nicely in the story. Well written, with a good flow.
Nice twist in the end:-)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from purrfect tale
Hah! I didn't expect the twist to be a 'gift' for the judge. I'm impress with how much of her personality you were able to express with the simple act of changing clothes. Didn't see anything I would change.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Hah! I didn't expect the twist to be a 'gift' for the judge. I'm impress with how much of her personality you were able to express with the simple act of changing clothes. Didn't see anything I would change.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Judy Couch
Well written and easy to follow. The ending was a surprise to me although I did sort of anticipatte it when you mentioned the judge's advice to the jury. You probably did take some liberties with the justice system because I think it would be unusual for this to happen in real life. That's what fiction is all about though.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Well written and easy to follow. The ending was a surprise to me although I did sort of anticipatte it when you mentioned the judge's advice to the jury. You probably did take some liberties with the justice system because I think it would be unusual for this to happen in real life. That's what fiction is all about though.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from janalma
Well written. I hope that this doesn't really happen, but knowing how things work, it probably does. You did a good job with dialogue and setting up the scene. Not an exciting story, but competent. (I know you only had 200 words.) Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Well written. I hope that this doesn't really happen, but knowing how things work, it probably does. You did a good job with dialogue and setting up the scene. Not an exciting story, but competent. (I know you only had 200 words.) Good job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from MissMerri
Excellent short story! Well constructed with just enough details cleverly included to give the reader all the necessary information. It is the sign of a good writer to know what to include and what can be left out without confusing the reader. This was incredibly well- done. Your author notes made me laugh. Very clever, you are. I enjoyed your little story.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Excellent short story! Well constructed with just enough details cleverly included to give the reader all the necessary information. It is the sign of a good writer to know what to include and what can be left out without confusing the reader. This was incredibly well- done. Your author notes made me laugh. Very clever, you are. I enjoyed your little story.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Bobbi22
That is one way to tip the scales. Suspenseful build up to the reading of the verdict and then the payoff. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
she returned though the deserted courtroom. --> through
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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That is one way to tip the scales. Suspenseful build up to the reading of the verdict and then the payoff. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
she returned though the deserted courtroom. --> through
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve