Red Geraniums
Free Verse Narrative: Fading into the darkness. .54 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Mrs. KT,
A marvelous poem telling about the love of a daughter for her aged mother. A bond of shared memories accented with the red of flowers. Very well done. It made me sad but it is the cycle of our lives.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Mrs. KT,
A marvelous poem telling about the love of a daughter for her aged mother. A bond of shared memories accented with the red of flowers. Very well done. It made me sad but it is the cycle of our lives.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Hello KT,
I was telling my husband just this morning how I always have to review your poetry, as well as Cheyennewy's when I see that you all have posted; you both are outstanding poets and I just wish you both could post more. I am never disappointed with anything you write. This one is no exception. Your words made me cry. I am so sorry for the loss of your dear, sweet mother.
God Bless,
Penny
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Hello KT,
I was telling my husband just this morning how I always have to review your poetry, as well as Cheyennewy's when I see that you all have posted; you both are outstanding poets and I just wish you both could post more. I am never disappointed with anything you write. This one is no exception. Your words made me cry. I am so sorry for the loss of your dear, sweet mother.
God Bless,
Penny
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Dear Penny! Well, Friend, your words made me cry! Ah...thank you so much for your kind words and review. I haven't post much lately as it is the end of the school year, but also I am publishing my first book of poems and short stories, and having been busy editting it. I am so excited, Penny. None of this would have happened had it not been for fanstory...I'll keep you posted. My little offering should be ready sometime this summer. It's titled. At The Water's Edge!
Thank you again, Friend.
diane
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That's fabulous! Please keep me posted on how all that is going with you, dear. Good luck with that and all of your endeavors.
Penny
Comment from heyjude
Mrs. KT,
Thanks for sharing this scene for your mother's life. It must have been very painful to see her health deteriate. It was good you could help her plant her precious red geraniums and that you took time with her.
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Mrs. KT,
Thanks for sharing this scene for your mother's life. It must have been very painful to see her health deteriate. It was good you could help her plant her precious red geraniums and that you took time with her.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from LynnRadford
Red Geraniums is a lovely tribtue to your mother's battle.
The verse is filled with emotion and I was moved by the telling. I liked the POV's, the voices were distinct and very real.
I am blessed for having stop to read here today.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Sincerely,
Lynn Radford
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Red Geraniums is a lovely tribtue to your mother's battle.
The verse is filled with emotion and I was moved by the telling. I liked the POV's, the voices were distinct and very real.
I am blessed for having stop to read here today.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Sincerely,
Lynn Radford
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from dportwood
Mrs. KT,
You have a well-written reminiscence of your mother's conditions. Good word choices reinforced with content.
Good job
dportwood
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Mrs. KT,
You have a well-written reminiscence of your mother's conditions. Good word choices reinforced with content.
Good job
dportwood
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from Artasylum
god belss you and your family and your beautiful mother who passed on...i love geraniums...growing up in florida they ran rampant...thanks so much for the read. yours diana
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god belss you and your family and your beautiful mother who passed on...i love geraniums...growing up in florida they ran rampant...thanks so much for the read. yours diana
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from jshep
"She kissed it tenderly and reverently for what had once been, for what would never be again, and for a lifetime of red geraniums and trailing ivy..." - This stanza touched my heart.
This is a beautifully written poem. The love is felt throughout as the daughter puts the soil into the pot and pats its around the geraniums, making the tea, kissing the hand. The words lovingly wrap around the reader.
Found no spag or recommended changes. A beautiful tribute to your mother and the love and patience of the relationship.
Excellent job.
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"She kissed it tenderly and reverently for what had once been, for what would never be again, and for a lifetime of red geraniums and trailing ivy..." - This stanza touched my heart.
This is a beautifully written poem. The love is felt throughout as the daughter puts the soil into the pot and pats its around the geraniums, making the tea, kissing the hand. The words lovingly wrap around the reader.
Found no spag or recommended changes. A beautiful tribute to your mother and the love and patience of the relationship.
Excellent job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from Veronica Grace
A wonderful tribute to you mother and a sad story as well. You have brought out the love and tenderness she deserved and shown us the importance of the two. It is so very hard to see our parents this way, I know. The loss can be devastating and hard to overcome. A great work. Veronica
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A wonderful tribute to you mother and a sad story as well. You have brought out the love and tenderness she deserved and shown us the importance of the two. It is so very hard to see our parents this way, I know. The loss can be devastating and hard to overcome. A great work. Veronica
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
Comment from Celtic~Soul
This is both enchanting and heart-breaking! You've created a lovely picture of devotion and patience to do what needs to be done in the face of such a humbling condition. The story is nicely crafted in the poetic form with the alternating thoughts and actions in the verses.
One nit:
check the line beginning 'from any' - odd line length here, might have dropped a return in the story editor
Your images were lovely and alive. The ending brought a tear. A wonderful poem to share.
CS
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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This is both enchanting and heart-breaking! You've created a lovely picture of devotion and patience to do what needs to be done in the face of such a humbling condition. The story is nicely crafted in the poetic form with the alternating thoughts and actions in the verses.
One nit:
check the line beginning 'from any' - odd line length here, might have dropped a return in the story editor
Your images were lovely and alive. The ending brought a tear. A wonderful poem to share.
CS
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Hello! Thank you so your kind review and for stopping by. Now this is interesting: I checked out the "edit" page, and the line you mention was aligned so as not to appear to lenghty. But when I went to the posting page, it was as you mention. So I went back to the edit page, and played with the "enter" button on my computer, and I believe all is well now. So strange. Again, thank you and I am truly glad you appreciated my offering. diane
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It's Evil Eddie - likes to swallow line returns and puke them back out where they don't belong. Sometimes, as someone pointed out to me once, italics can mess with the line returns. That may have been part of the cause. Lovely, lovely, poem!
Comment from RaymondJohn
Anyone who has, or will, face this needs to read this. Heartbresakingly poignant, I find I can't see the screen very well through tears. Beautiful images. I have seldom read a better poem on any image. Thanks for the wonderful offering. Ray
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Anyone who has, or will, face this needs to read this. Heartbresakingly poignant, I find I can't see the screen very well through tears. Beautiful images. I have seldom read a better poem on any image. Thanks for the wonderful offering. Ray
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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Ah! Much too kind, Friend. But I surely appreciate your wonderful review. I was attempting, to show the demise of my mother, but also to share that I on that particular day, I was annoyed - referring to her as "old woman" and concentrating more on the planting than what she was saying. Then ending with realizing that I was soon to lose my mother as I knew her......Again, so many emotions....Thank you......diane