Your Honour
200 word flash fiction63 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
A little collusion there, eh? Probably more truth than fiction to this little 200-word story. Well written and flowed nicely.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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A little collusion there, eh? Probably more truth than fiction to this little 200-word story. Well written and flowed nicely.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Hmmm.. some people marked it down for its unlikely plot!
Thanks.
Steve
Comment from mauial
I liked your story and how it ended. But there was one sentence in this that seemed gramatically wrong: The judge's beady eyes blinked and his bald head shone. Is it shined instead?
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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I liked your story and how it ended. But there was one sentence in this that seemed gramatically wrong: The judge's beady eyes blinked and his bald head shone. Is it shined instead?
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I suspect the justice system is taking some liberties of its own in your cynical (not undeservedly so) short story. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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I suspect the justice system is taking some liberties of its own in your cynical (not undeservedly so) short story. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Thank you, Nancy!
Steve
Comment from johnsonbarbara
Great little story! Thanks for a good laugh this morning. Editing was done well, nothing to comment on in this story. Good job of using all the words in the prompt.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Great little story! Thanks for a good laugh this morning. Editing was done well, nothing to comment on in this story. Good job of using all the words in the prompt.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hmm ... interesting story. So, the judge was in cahoots with the defendent .....
Good work.
Good luck in the contest!
spags:
"We have, your honour." (not "We have, Your Honour.")
make up (no hyphen)
Surprisingly most of his summing up (not to most of his summing up)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Hmm ... interesting story. So, the judge was in cahoots with the defendent .....
Good work.
Good luck in the contest!
spags:
"We have, your honour." (not "We have, Your Honour.")
make up (no hyphen)
Surprisingly most of his summing up (not to most of his summing up)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrry good! May very well win the contest. I'm leaning toward it right now, but still must read the others. I can't wait to find out who you are.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Verrry good! May very well win the contest. I'm leaning toward it right now, but still must read the others. I can't wait to find out who you are.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you - I should think you'd know the style by now - I have been told it's more recognizable than a signature...
Comment from Glasstruth
Always knew judges were corrupt. The ending is a great twist, and it shows people don't learn until the book is thrown at them (meaning they're caught) Great write! Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Always knew judges were corrupt. The ending is a great twist, and it shows people don't learn until the book is thrown at them (meaning they're caught) Great write! Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013
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Thank you, Les!
Steve
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
Actually you took no liberties. The horrors of corruption! I know of a judge, on the bench, who's assigned ALL the drug cases. She sends them ALL to a rehab she where she is 1/2 owner! Another that invites under age girls to "party". (I have the facts to back up my statements).
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Actually you took no liberties. The horrors of corruption! I know of a judge, on the bench, who's assigned ALL the drug cases. She sends them ALL to a rehab she where she is 1/2 owner! Another that invites under age girls to "party". (I have the facts to back up my statements).
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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...and yet some people say my story is unrealistic!
Thanks for the review.
Steve
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Yep. Sadly they'll be one's to say they didn't see it coming when the states become a dictatorship! sux for all of us...
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is hysterical--very funny. It seems the judge knew his way around, ahem, the law. You have created sympathy for Gaby, which wasn't easy. A fun piece all the way around.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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This is hysterical--very funny. It seems the judge knew his way around, ahem, the law. You have created sympathy for Gaby, which wasn't easy. A fun piece all the way around.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thanks, Alvin - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from eowyn0003
I think you did a wonderful job. I found this very creepy. Was she there to pay the judge off for his "tipping the scale"? Or was she a "Black Widow" ready to commit another murder? You leave the reader to wonder, and want more. That's a good suspense story.
Shalom,
Lura
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I think you did a wonderful job. I found this very creepy. Was she there to pay the judge off for his "tipping the scale"? Or was she a "Black Widow" ready to commit another murder? You leave the reader to wonder, and want more. That's a good suspense story.
Shalom,
Lura
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you...
Steve