Last Flight of the Red Baron.
Thinking about history.80 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
You did very well telling the story of the Red Baron. You used an irregular meter, but again, your descriptive narrative was quite good detailing the appearance and the action of the air battle. Well done.
Z
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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You did very well telling the story of the Red Baron. You used an irregular meter, but again, your descriptive narrative was quite good detailing the appearance and the action of the air battle. Well done.
Z
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you Robert for your review. I really appreciate that!
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You're welcome. Z
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Roger that!
Comment from Thesis
I enjoyed how you wrote this. You guided the reader through an aerial fight where the words formed my mind's vision of the air battle. Stressing the skill of both pilots, knowing one would ultimately win was a good ending.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed how you wrote this. You guided the reader through an aerial fight where the words formed my mind's vision of the air battle. Stressing the skill of both pilots, knowing one would ultimately win was a good ending.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you Thesis. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from kahpot
Another great read, if I had to ask one thing it would be-try not to repeat
actions-as in the use of descriptive words, "the burning triplane spirals downward in a spin" as here-spiral and spin to me they are the same, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Another great read, if I had to ask one thing it would be-try not to repeat
actions-as in the use of descriptive words, "the burning triplane spirals downward in a spin" as here-spiral and spin to me they are the same, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much kahpot for the great review. You are so right. I never caught that. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Carol Clark2
I think I learned about this famous air battle from Snoopy at first. Your poem has filled in all the details so I have a better understanding of the event. Good rhymes, especially propeller and stellar. Have a great weekend. Carol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I think I learned about this famous air battle from Snoopy at first. Your poem has filled in all the details so I have a better understanding of the event. Good rhymes, especially propeller and stellar. Have a great weekend. Carol
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Carol for your great review. I really appreciate that!
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You're welcome. Glad to learn a few details I missed earlier.
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Roger that!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem captures the intensity of an aerial battle beautifully! The imagery of the Fokker triplane and the fast paced dogfight really pulled me in. I especially liked the descriptions of the chase. The final lines ended it so well. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Your poem captures the intensity of an aerial battle beautifully! The imagery of the Fokker triplane and the fast paced dogfight really pulled me in. I especially liked the descriptions of the chase. The final lines ended it so well. Great job!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you Michael for your review. I really appreciate that!
Comment from gangreen
atmospheric and well paced, imagery and rhythm give a good sense of a dog fight.informative as well.Perhaps -of the plane- could be removed from line nineteen, leaving it a.s fuselage.this would save the repetition of the rhyming of plane,just a thought.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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atmospheric and well paced, imagery and rhythm give a good sense of a dog fight.informative as well.Perhaps -of the plane- could be removed from line nineteen, leaving it a.s fuselage.this would save the repetition of the rhyming of plane,just a thought.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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THanks.
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no problem,a pleasure to read.
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Harry! I have always been fascinated by the Red Baron. Your poem has a kinetic energy to it that resembles its subject, and this is very well done. I think the irregular rhyme scheme is what gives this quality, especially with words like "splutters," "shudders," and "flutters." My favorite part of the poem was the simile you used in the third stanza comparing the Baron's maneuver to "bees fleeing from a burning hive." Very good poem with lots of rythmic energy, just like a dogfight should be portrayed! Thank you for sharing your talent!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Hello Harry! I have always been fascinated by the Red Baron. Your poem has a kinetic energy to it that resembles its subject, and this is very well done. I think the irregular rhyme scheme is what gives this quality, especially with words like "splutters," "shudders," and "flutters." My favorite part of the poem was the simile you used in the third stanza comparing the Baron's maneuver to "bees fleeing from a burning hive." Very good poem with lots of rythmic energy, just like a dogfight should be portrayed! Thank you for sharing your talent!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you Bernard for your review!
Comment from papa55mike
It sounds like the old Snoopy song which has linked the Red Baron and him together for all time. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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It sounds like the old Snoopy song which has linked the Red Baron and him together for all time. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you mike. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Boogienights
This is a terrific poem, it's very interesting, also exciting and very descriptive. Does the red baron stand for all he Russian soldiers? Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This is a terrific poem, it's very interesting, also exciting and very descriptive. Does the red baron stand for all he Russian soldiers? Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate that! No the Red Baron was a WW1 German fighter pilot.
Comment from bonespur
This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The structure and rhyming scheme seems good, and the subject matter interesting. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The structure and rhyming scheme seems good, and the subject matter interesting. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you bonespur. I really appreciate your review!