Revenge
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Revenge - Chap 30"Evil stalks the dynamic crime team
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Comment from royowen
Now there's a brilliant curve ball for you. You wrote something quite different, bringing in a relative of one of the bad guys, and he knows Samantha, despite her appearance change. But the relief of Marian getting in touch is only momentary, as someone knocks on her door. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : His cloak and (danger) expression. Dagger?
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Now there's a brilliant curve ball for you. You wrote something quite different, bringing in a relative of one of the bad guys, and he knows Samantha, despite her appearance change. But the relief of Marian getting in touch is only momentary, as someone knocks on her door. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : His cloak and (danger) expression. Dagger?
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
Comment from Sylla
Dialogue is very difficult to get down, but you embraced it fully! I love the flow between characters, and the way you address fear and uncertainty without saying it directly. Fabulous chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Dialogue is very difficult to get down, but you embraced it fully! I love the flow between characters, and the way you address fear and uncertainty without saying it directly. Fabulous chapter.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for stopping by to read a chapter of my novel. I am glad you enjoyed it and look forward to hearing from you again.
Smiles, CArol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is sure a fast-moving, and action-packed story. It grabs the reader and takes them along for the ride. The dialogue is great and it is what helps keep the story moving so well. I didn't spot anything to complain about.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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This is sure a fast-moving, and action-packed story. It grabs the reader and takes them along for the ride. The dialogue is great and it is what helps keep the story moving so well. I didn't spot anything to complain about.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Good morning, my friend. so happy to see you again. The cards have been played and the story is about to explode wide open. i hope you enjoy it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Wow. So many undercurrents and troublesome developments! I am afraid we can't trust all the players we think we can - and there are so many!
Great plotting as always!
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Carol,
Wow. So many undercurrents and troublesome developments! I am afraid we can't trust all the players we think we can - and there are so many!
Great plotting as always!
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Hello, Sweetie... I read all your reviews and I know you have enjoyed the story. I thank you so much. It's hard for me to keep up with everything, but I will get to them and respond as soon as possible. Thanks!
Hugs, Carol
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You just did. Let it go. One less thing to mess with. Smoooooches-
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is getting better and better. Keep up the good work.
Max leaned forward and continued speaking. "I'm sorry, Sam, but right now, I need to focus on the present. (comma needed after 'speaking')
I also know that you and Scarlett are working a case at the mansion." (You can omit 'that;)
"Maybe all you Welchers are alike." Samantha's voice quivered. "Has something happened to her?" (comma needed after 'quivered')
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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This is getting better and better. Keep up the good work.
Max leaned forward and continued speaking. "I'm sorry, Sam, but right now, I need to focus on the present. (comma needed after 'speaking')
I also know that you and Scarlett are working a case at the mansion." (You can omit 'that;)
"Maybe all you Welchers are alike." Samantha's voice quivered. "Has something happened to her?" (comma needed after 'quivered')
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thanks for reading, enjoying, and reviewing...especially for my goofs. I guess even the software is working against me..LOL I had those commas and was told to change it... Not the "that", though. I have to claim it as purely me! LOL
Smiles, Carol
Smiles, Carol
