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A Lachesis
Andalusia by phill doran
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A cloudless sky where seabirds wheel,
a castanet, the crack of heel,
a note sustained on strings of steel;
the lovers stir the noonday dust,
her red, his black - their honeyed lust.

As music rises, mantis arms
with wings of shawl and silver charms,
entwine like vines and dance disarms
in strut and draw; each moment snakes
'til bodies brush and thunder breaks.

His torso twists in arch and swerve,
her back exposed, each sinew, nerve
in climax, then the downward curve
of afterglow; the ebb from swell
which ripples, like the distant bell.

Their passion drifts upon the breeze
beyond the rows of olive trees,
by white-washed walls and sleeping seas.


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Author Notes
This is one of a series based on the 'idea' of Spain - this one is in the form of a Lachesis of 18 lines with each verse comprising a triplet and couplet in (an attempted) iambic tetrameter. The rhyme scheme is aaa & bb - ccc & dd - eee & ff with a conclusion of ggg. It is a simple form and it is hard not to make it sing-songy.

     

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