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Haibun (used alliteration and metaphor)
2024 Gypsy's Prose
: With a Heavy Heart by Gypsy Blue Rose

With a heavy heart, she cuddles with blue dusk to pacify her woven warp-and-weft woes.  At dawn’s light, she’s carried away by her wistful longing.  The pain and grief reflect on her blue eyes, they are the window to her soul.

interred in night’s grave,

she’s veiled with black lace

and wooed by howling wind

 

Author Notes
- in Spain, when a loved one dies, women wear black to express their grief. At church, they wear black lace veils to cover their head. In general, women wear veils on their heads at church. All these were customs when I was a little girl, it may have changed.

- Interred: to deposit (a dead body) in the earth

Haibun is a Japanese poetic form that combines haiku with prose. It's in present or past tense. The subject matter can be autobiographical, a travel journal, a slice of life, a memory, a dream, or a short sketch of a person, place, or event. Topics can be about life, love affairs, human concerns, and experiences. The point of view is first person (the author's eyes), or third person (he/she). Use imagery, sensory, and concrete details. Length varies from very brief (1-2 sentences) with one haiku, to long prose entries with interspersed haiku.

The prose tells the story, gives information, defines the theme, creates a mood through tone, provides a background to spotlight the haiku

The haiku moves the story forward, takes the narrative in another direction, adds insight or another dimension to the prose, resolves the conflict in an unpredictable way, or questions the resolution of the prose. Prose is the narrative and haiku is the revelation or the reaction.

click here to read guidelines for writing haibun for Haibun Today examples and more information click here for Wikipedia definition click here for Graceguts- more information click here click here for a pdf file of guidelines

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem,

Gypsy

Pictures from my Pinterest account. Poem and presentation by Gypsy Blue Rose COPYWRITE@2024

     

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